All Comments on 'The Step Sister Ch. 01'

I loved it. This is one of the hottest stories I have ever read. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep it up.

Fantastic. what a hot story and well done for your first. I am hoping this is going to blossom into a real relationship for these two and they stay together as a couple and make some babies.

Great story, please continue it.

Great Story, overall good writing, there are some odd word choices and sentences that need rework. There are a few places where word exchanges were made (waste instead of waist for example) but definitely worth a read. I look forward to the next chapter.

WOW! Great take and execution on a common theme. Never get tired of it and loved your rendition. Keep writing please you have talent that will only get better as you gain experience. This may be your first but it is much better than a lot of the stuff here on Literotica from authors who have been around awhile. Your work is readable and draws the reader in to the moment.

5 stars for talent, promise and a darned good story!

On to chapter 2

Cheers

SAGE

Others have already said it, but you need an editor! The random capital letters alone are very off-putting, but dialogue also needs work.

It was an OK story. Just Ok. Besides, it's not incest or taboo.

GREAT STORY