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Reasonable idea, but more a narrative than a story. Very little dialogue and very basic description. I didn't feel anything for any of the characters and, quite frankly, none of them appealed to me - I'm happy this was as short as it was since I do not feel like investing any more of my time in it without a hint that something was going to happen: are they going to topple him, maybe one of the girls is an undercover cop, are they out for revenge or is it a sting for his money? At the moment it is just more of a scene than anything...

The category is a little misleading - it was more bisexual than lesbian with the older woman, we are told, being straight and her sister engaging in penetrative sex with a man. Maybe erotic couplings would have been a better place, or possibly incest?

A few spelling mistakes and missing letters too.