All Comments on 'The Substitute Ch. 03'

Melanie knows she's pregnant 2 days after dad fucks her? I know this is fantasy but Damn. Some realism please?

1 star

IronCross55

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Will it be Melanie's asshole husband?

I believe it was 3wks after the first time....they were back in the hotel room & she said, “Mom told you”. The body begins producing HCG immediately after conception. A blood test can detect a pregnancy about a week after conception (8 days, I believe), & the more sensitive home pregnancy tests can detect it 8-10 days after. Some women start experiencing symptoms almost immediately. Sore breasts, extreme fatigue, nausea, & cramping can occur within 24-48hrs after conception. And.....thus concludes our biology lesson for today. You’re welcome.

Who else would it be? If it's not Paul, it would be a character out of the blue, someone who was not established before in the series. That would be very, very bad writing.

I can’t wait till the next chapter maybe have the mom eat the cum out of her pussy and put it the daughters husbands mouth. Damn I’m a freak

We need another chapter.

Dad and Daughter need more loving. Maybe Mom will start putting out more. Husband is a dick

The surprise twist endings is not working for me you set up your stories great then fun then with an attempt at a surprise ending so now super stud Paul who was trashed in previous chapters is gonna fuck the mom and great job making mel.a complete whore by adding her past sexual history. Gave zero fucks about any of them by the end just have a meteor hit the house killing all for all I give a fuck. Read two serious of yours but doubt want to give you another chance with any other writing doubt I could finish it if your formula for all stories are the same.

Great story so far. We must see chapter 4 soon! Thx.

God, you got me hard!

Keep going, excellent story!

As previous comments stated about the twists at the end ruining your stories, maybe revisit the ending. Instead of having someone enter the room she puts on a strap on and joins in the fun, best of luck with chapter 4

You need to end it.

Nooo! Don't stop!!! Not when hot Mom is just getting warmed up!!

Please print chapter 4. You got me so hot and I need to read the rest

Where's the ending???

As this awesome story is 2 yrs old, I know there will not be a #4. The last sentence said it all and it takes no imagination to guess where this story line goes.

wow, read all three, so HOT, left me wanting even more, please give us more

You're still writing (The Bucket List) so please write the 4th chapter so we can see who is going to fuck Carol! Five stars and a favorite point!

You stopped there? Where’s the next page? Where’s the next chapter???? I need to know what happens! Who comes in to fuck Carol while she makes Many and Mel fuck like primal lustful beasts. Is it mels husband? Or someone else???? What happens next? What happens??? Please tell us!

I think this is done on purpose, it seams to be MountainDewMan's MO, write a really good story, that keeps us readers drawn in, and then keep us hanging, never getting the end of the story's, if you read most of his work, you will see the same pattern, over and over again, it's sad really, because he DO write very well, just looks like he hates endings.

More please!!!!

I can't believe the writer left his audience hanging like this. What a good story, just don't understand why the author decided to write his books like this. Just so wrong.!

Loved it! Definitely looking forward to a chapter 4 to see who the mystery person could be. Is it Melanie's husband Paul or could it be Paul's father or perhaps a partner of her husband's who Mom has been secretly fucking on the side. However you chose to please your readers giving us the orgasm we are desperately trying to reach salavating on the conclusion. Pleeeeaaasse Daddyyyy!!!

YOU have GOT to finish this story!!!!

NO WAYYYYYYY. 😩😩😩😩who came in... the husband, maybe mom has been having sex with son in law???? WHATTTTTT HAPPENED 😩😩😩

Hated the bitch Carol part

Started well but when things get too porny and people start calling each other slut and bitch it's a turn-off for me, I'm afraid.

Write another story and tell us how husband reacts to seeing wife carrying her Dad's baby, may be he should help them later and take care of baby while his Wife and Dad continue to work on having another baby in his bedroom while he sleeps in Guest bedroom hearing them both

This Chapter was a bit shocking, but it was nice to see that Dad and Daughter were still able to perform, even under the pressure exerted by Mom. But there must be another part yet to come?

I can only guess that Carol made them fuck so that she could be reassured that an extra load of cum would add to the assurance that Melanie was pregnant and would stay that way until she has a baby. Either that or maybe she wants Melanie's husband for herself and lets Manny keep fucking Melanie until she has her family.

Actually, many great authors left stories unfinished leaving the readers to make the ending whatever satisfies them. Agatha Christie and Alfred Hitchcock did that quite often.

So sexy and beautiful. What happens next?

Clever carol i suppose she will share paul and force manny to give her more as well and paul will divorce Melanie.. wicked

Please update thisssss

You can't stop now!!!!

This story should have ended at chapter 2. 2*

CAROL IS A BITCH.

This chapter was kinda disappointing. And if it turns out to be Paul, that is a horrible twist. Guy wasn't man enough to get her pregnant and, worse yet, refused to acknowledge that possibility.

Great story spoiled by the bitch wife, Carol.

Aaaaannnndddd...

But for what the series is - 11/10!!!!!

question is will the guy coming in be their son or HER father?

The only person in the house is Melanie’s husband. 😂

…and then Manny woke up.

Not finishing a story because you want the reader to “use their own imagination” is a cop out. You have no intentions of writing an ending, do you? I don’t say this to goad you into writing more, it’s just a shitty thing to do. Sorry, that’s how I feel, and I suspect a number of your other (former) readers, too.

Straight into the cess pool.

Just gross. Leave the dad and daughter and get rid of everyone else. Ridiculous and disgusting beyond the daddy and daughter plot line.

This is just awful. Was hot till anyone outside of the F and D were roped into this mess.

Are you telling me that the wife cheated on her husband with her son in law Paul while they both let her daughter get pregnant with her own father baby

Anytime an I/T story goes into harem territory, it's ruined. This is a perfect example of that happening.

Enjoyed the story but hated the ending

Probably her moms dad. Ger with it and FTDS

This story went to shit as soon as the mom got involved. Gross.

Thank you for an ending that made sense and was so hot. Lol, even here another chapter would have worked! Looking at the other comments, they seem mixed, my tip is Mel’s husband. Great story.

Now I notice a pattern with this author. He likes to include the wife into the father/daughter stories. I would’ve stopped reading from the beginning if only I had known that was happening in this one too. Gross. This chapter and ending ruined it. At least add a tag letting other readers know about the mom/daughter inclusion, it would draw in the right audience.

What is really bizarre is all the people saying this is gross because of the results. They are somehow excited by the immorality of the first events, but can't handle a different twist to it. It's pretty stupid to enjoy a father destroying two marriages, getting excited by that, and then not being able to handle the rest of it. You need to check your mental health if you have a problem with this because the first is much worse than the rest, even if you don't see it that way. If so, you've got some mental problems, and some heart problems as well. Both are pretty bent...

My bet is Carol's father...

Great story.... can't wait for the next chapter

Please give us the next chapter .. my cunt is so hot and wet that my dildoe keeps slipping out of my hand 💧 🔥 🌮 😘

Disappointing turn of events. This was a daddy daughter story n this chapter ruined it

Not sure if this story needs a 4th person but it was quite Hot so far.

I don't think you needed the 'twist' in the tale. It was hotter as a daddy-daughter twosome, but it's your story; you must tell it how you want. Also, I think the father might have resisted a little more. Everything got going a bit too quickly, I think. But the sex was hot and it was a fun, raunchy story.