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All Comments on 'The Subway or The Bedroom'

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AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

Possible reasonable attempt but terrible punctuation.

Boyd PercyBoyd Percy10 months ago

Holy coincidence!

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AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

„She couldn't wait to see what it looked like all she knows it was going to be a part of the new style and she was going to first to wear it.“

That is in the first or second para of the story. What about tenses, grammar, punctuation?

„She thought to herself as long as I have his special cum inside I can't fail the producer lead her to a changing room where she saw this amazing dress the producer said.“

This is almost at the end of the story. Same questions!

And in between? No clue, I did not waste my time. Sorry, but this is not readable. Get at least an editor.

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

Please don’t continue. You have no understanding of English. Maybe use the time to go back to school

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