All Comments on 'The Surrogate Wife'

Beautiful story

Damit that made me cry lol

I can’t give this more than a 3 even though I wanted to; it skipped from First Person to Third Persn and from present tense to past tense, sometimes within a single paragraph. Editing and correcting these issues would have made this a 5.

A stoker

KinPA is right about the person and tense shifting.

I gave it a 5 anyway, since it was a good story with good character development.

Ended up being a tear jerker but well done

The best story I have read on Literotica.

Very good 👍

Good idea, reasonable story but the writing was atrocious. 1st person, 3rd person, present tense, past tense and eveything in between. Get a good editor and make future stories 5 star instead of the 3 star rating I gave this

I repeat; that was another great rerun of a terrific story. Thank you for the rewrite.

Again a story that was both entertaining and erotic , there was no down side to it ,apart from the morons that keep banging on about get an editor , the grammar is wrong , past tense and so on , when will these people realise that most writers on here ARE NOT PROFESSIONALS , and most readers do not care and write for there own enjoyment and that of there readers , almost all the critique's are either anonymous or have never written a story of there own that others can critique , so where they get the balls from to critique other peoples work is beyond me , so CB_GRL_DANI do not be put off by these morons they are not who your readers are , we the general public are the real readers who accept what you write , in the way that you do it not how they think it SHOULD be , keep writing and i will keep reading as i'm sure most others will to xx

A cracking story. I loved it,

Good story mate. Honest to god, vest satisfying ending. Thank you for your work

So very nice. You just don't know where life takes you. Go with it.

A lovely story, I think it is great. AAAAAA++++++

No offense but I just read this same story. Minus some of the details at the end. Idk who wrote it first...

This is sethp story. He wrote it in 2019.

An excellent story. Have read this a few times now and it will not be the last.

Good remix/rewrite!

10/10!!!!!

Except for their relationship becoming sexual before her husband died, this was an excellent story.

I would have had her husband drown within a week of her moving in, then have the relationship turn romantic.

It was good up until the end :/

CB_Grl_Dani,

Very well done.

I liked that they added to their family.

WB

Well done, this story as you wrote it is heads and shoulders above the original, not that there was anything wrong with the original but this one was a complete loving story with 3 more kids and a happily ever after.. 5/5

Very good very good.

CB_Girl_Dani this was another great story please keep up the good work and thank you again.

Emotional Ending. Thanks.

This is a VERY-VERY beautiful story.... in every aspect I can think of.

Keep up your talented work.

BLESS you my friend.

A very well written story. Thank you.

If I had known you were going to write this I would have only given the original a 4.... A very nice improvement on an already good story. Thanks for this!

Loved this story. Well done!

What a great ending.

WHEW! It had its moments; but really did you ever think of proofreading? Example: "she shoved took the sheet"... I mean really; what does that mean?

It was a good story but I think if you would added a short story summary on how Karen passed and why before going into the main story

Beautiful

SOME CONFUSION OF TENSES, BUT I LIKED IT ANYHOW! CINCO ESTRELLAS!

Great story, loved it.

A nice story, bravo CB. Forgive me for pointing out inconsistencies in your composition. You ought to decide whether you are writing in the PRESENT tense or the PAST. You also should settle for FIRST PERSON or THIRD PERSON. Jumping backwards and forwards and sideways is a definite distraction to the reader. Otherwise a well told tale. Thank you.

I forgot to mention, CB. We don't drink accessively - we drink excessively. :)

Editing is recommended for this and other small mishaps...