All Comments on 'The Tales of Tamil - Uh, Talimor'

If you decide to continue to write this story, I will read it..

I LOVE a long chapter!!! Fuck me, this is an EPIC tale. This is what I aspire to get to. Most of my stories are looked at as a quick spank tale with some story... you are a very talented story teller. Can NOT WAIT, for the next chapter!

Loved reading this, as always! Can’t wait for the next chapter! ;)

This was very good. I came for the erotica and stayed for the plot. Also I normally don’t go for 2nd person narrations but it’s really good.

Your.plot is really really good. The prose isn't on the level of professionally published authors but still excellent for literotica. I am definitely interested in reading more of this story if you choose to continue it. Though if the next installment is as long as this one I am sure it will take awhile.

Thanks for posting.

This was a lot of fun. It seems like there's a lot of potential for this to be continued, and I hope you intend to deliver. I love the emergent dynamic between Mia and Tarra. The reveal of Law's incentives, and the perspective character's conversation with him, were a really nice touch. I think as long as you keep the perspective character fundamentally decent, this could end up being one of the better sexy isekai stories. Thanks for sharing!

I'm torn because this story is pretty good, but 2nd person narrative is awful. There is a reason barely any novelist uses it. Up til now I've never encountered a 2nd person story I actually liked. Its so off-putting, yet by the end I could kind of ignore it. Its feels so entitled to say, but I'd love for you to rewrite it into 1st or 3rd person.

I wanted to get into this, and maybe it was just the mood I'm in, but the 2nd person perspective along with the language barrier when he first comes to this world just put me off. I'm sure I could have 'gotten used to it' but it really didn't have enough meat in the story to hold my interest so that I'd want to put up with the annoyance of it. I stopped reading on the 2nd page.

@WretchedMonkey totally understandable. I thought it would be a fun Easter egg for people to find, but perhaps I should have included the translations.

Anyway, itheyre speaking Scottish Gaelic a la Google translate