All Comments on 'The Tax Divorce'

Good story but it ended abruptly. 5*

Very good. Could have added a few more paragraphs to tell us how his wife got on over the next year or so. Still a 5 star story for me.

Oh no! You ended it just as you got to the best part! The true consequences to her infidelity.

What happened when Libby found out he was now worth $10m? With that kind of money, he could buy a fantastic home and attract a hot young trophy wife. Reading about the cheating ex-wife's jealousy and anger would've been great!

Did the children ever forgive her? What about a post-divorce confrontation where she's either:

1) enraged that he swindled her out of millions and tossed her aside for a woman half her age.

2) depressed and full of remorse that she destroyed her marriage and ruined her relationships with husband, children, and parents.

Tax divorce plot was very nice but the part after he confronted his wife was rather weak.

It's a pity more things like this don't happen to selfish sluts! The US 'family law' regarding divorce makes an oxymoron of the phrase 'American Justice' I agree there should be a 'no fault' alternative to allow divorce without violence and acrimony but if there is one spouse at fault THEY SHOULD PAY for their breech of the marriage CONTRACT... and contract IT IS! One of the most open and public display of a 'meeting of the minds' is a marriage ceremony. Not even considering the 'offer', 'acceptance' and 'consideration' of "with all of my worldy goods"... etc! There has to be a time when this CORRUPT system is repealed and forever abandoned!

Good Story if a little complex for my simple... and somewhat aged mind!

Nice story, good old Gerry !

I hope you give him a very large bonus for digging you out of so much crap

Good imagination and good plot. But no development of main characters. After being married for 20 years, cheating without any detail or explanation just falls a little flat.

A little to much narration and lacking in the dialogue for this reader. 4*

"But she is the cheater, she needs to be punishment?" is an example. Sloppy and poorly written.

. . . the end seemed kind of abrupt, as though the author lost interest once he had settled the tax issues.

The kids hating the cheating mother has been used so often it has become a cliche on LW. Yeah, kids can get angry, but how many really hate their mothers?

Creative and well written. Thanks

In fact the only person who expressed real emotion and distress was the whore, Libby. The husband became rather perfunctory and calculated, not caring about why his marriage failed, how he had chosen such a despicable person for a wife, or what had changed her from a loyal wife and mother to a common promiscuous slut. Yes, she may learn from her experience to be a better wife to the next husband, but this guy only learned how to escape a bad marriage, not avoid a bad woman. Just maybe he contributed in some way to her disrespect and arrogance?

Anyway, it was an interesting idea for a story. Thanks for the effort.

It seemed like the ending wasn't really an ending. It just.......stopped.

If the kids are out of the house, wouldn't the house be split? Either sold and the proceeds split, or one buying out the other?

Why would the business have to be sold? Wouldn't they each just own half?

Finally! The government comes through for the husband! 5* for the story and 10* for being so original.

Nice plot; great revenge. But you need an editor to eliminate the obvious errors. I hope you keep writing.

Original way to deal with the fallout of divorce - well done.

5/5

Not sure if this is legal and frankly I don’t care. It was a unique way to BTB.

When you are writing about the law - you should probably do just a tiny bit of research first... there is no such thing in the law as a "Quick Claim" Deed, those do not exist (in any jurisdiction I am aware of - but I'm NOT a lawyer either)... What you are thinking of is called a Quit-Claim Deed (or) Quitclaim Deed.

You have a few other small grammatical errors - but nothing too serious... like I said its a GOOD Story - just not a "Great" one. 4/5

My last federal income tax course I took st Seattle U in 1975 did not have the tax divorce as part of the curriculum.

All she need was to find the bill for the services used by the P.I. And that would put the divorce in the garbage dump. I am not taking her side but givin the years and 2 children she didn’t need to lose so much. We all know there is no justice in divorced. Men fail to pay child support and the children live in property while most men make out much better. That’s a fact. Men cheat more as there hormones and opportunity will get them to break their vows. So many reasons for both side to cheat.

The utter shock at seeing Taylorsam doing a BTB caused me to give you *5. The story was pretty dang good until the end. As virtually every comment has pointed out, it just died. It needed at least a good epilogue to wrap things up cleanly. Despite the end, I did enjoy your story. The first one I've ever read and scored. Thanks.

I love when a plan comes together

Would have liked to see Libby's rejection by her parents and children played out longer.

Yep! She got burnt and collected on garbage day..5 Stars ★ ★ ★ ★ ★

First things first, thank you for a story that at least saved the day as far as stories go.

Next, nice different idea for revenge.

Last, why do people ask for thoughts, emotions and endings for other people in a story written in first person, the MC would have no idea how or what they felt. As far as an ending after where he left it off would have meant that TJ gave a shit to follow up on her, I didn't get that impression that he did.

5 stars

Well I don't know about the legal aspects, but the story was funnier than hell! He seemed to step back and forth about telling her that he knew she was cheating long before the divorce but she never admitted to herself that she was a greedy bitch that wanted to have her cake and eat it too. I wonder how that cake tastes now? Well played.

4 stars

Fun short!

It is tax season

...that it was too short....because I liked it..was fun, entertaining, and no one got killed, nor sick with anything...*****

I love these kind of stories. Better than that limp dick pathetic cuck garbage.

he cheats he's a dirt bag,,,,,talk about a double standard

But this got what it deserved - none - pathetic attempt

that you know anything about tax law when you say "quick claim deed."

It's "quit claim deed", and it isn't even necessary when the property ownership is mentioned in the divorce decree.

Chapter 3 ??

Well it's some unbelievable bullshit, it toes LW trope "divorce laws are set up to screw the man" nonsense, but still the best short (4 page or less) LW story I've seen here in at least a month, so bravo.

Very original revenge idea with the tax divorce. Absolutely zero cucky shit like describing still fucking her after finding out she's cheating or any of that nonsense. No wimpy RAAC bullshit. No soft and gentle split up, the bitch actually did get burned and it was all (technically) legal, no murder or slavery shit. No "ex special forces buddy stomps their balls until their nuts are ruptured" garbage. No unnecessary final page about the happily ever after with the new model big tits cocksuck machine with world class cooking and housekeeping skills. I like it.

Even though the story was short, I enjoyed the Tax Divorce angle of the story ,Great Short Story.

Haven't heard of a tax divorce previously. Way to come up with a different kind of BTB. I liked it.

I thought Sweetie was hot to quit her job?

...good story. Thanx! 5 stars.

Loklie

. . . the law doesn’t always mete out justice for cheated on husbands. But the law does not exist to dispense justice; it exists to make order easier for the state. Once you understand that, everything makes sense.

The state doesn’t care that your wife cheated on you, and certainly doesn’t care why she did it. The state simply wants to make divorce orderly and reduce the liability of the taxpayers for supporting children. The only reason the state recognizes marriage at all is to regularize inheritance and require men to support their children.

You premises are just BS.

The lawyer would be disbarred.

The second most common, asinine thing said in the stories in this category is “if it had only been once, I might have” blah, ba-blah, ba-blah! The first, of course, is “Honey, it didn’t mean anything”.

Completely ridiculous - every time!

BTB at it's finest!

Loved it.

she felt like she could control and manipulate others, use and abuse others.

and people noticed, not just her husband. if married spouses were punished in divorce court for infidelity, there would be a lot less cheating going on.

it used to favor women very unfairly, but now it's more about "who makes more money?" and tries to socialism the whole affair, meaning the government gets the lion's share of their assets, and then they hand the crumbs evenly to the spouses. now, if you're the cheating spouse, and contribute less than the other...than that broken system only empowers you to cheat (man or woman).

so good on you author! you made a very clever tale that seemed plausible. the cheated on spouse manipulated the system to make a more clean and fair break from his cheating wife. ultimately, the wife punished herself. her greed for sex and belief that she could manipulate her husband if ever caught created a monster. he never hurt her physically nor mentally. he just handed her a shovel to dig her own pit-fall.

But I felt it kind of came to an abrupt ending, but overall really great story with a unique idea.

I got that far. Too many errors to keep reading.

You made me smile.

Even the wife's own father is on the perfect husbands side.

The level of fantsy shown by lit authors in their fevereshly desperate attempts to really burn the bitch would make Walt Disney blush.

It does not happen in real life but it happens in lit stories almost every other time.

But , I ran into my wife Anonymous, dude your comment was better than 2/3 of the actual stories posted here in the past month. Your story is in the other 1/3 taylorsam.

Okay. Needs proof reading, but not really bad. At least he got her a good one.

Needed a bit more at the end. Telling her was too fast and an anticlimax.

Seems like it stopped short

Anony said

As a lawyer and MS in Tax

You premises are just BS.

The lawyer would be disbarred.

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The accountant suggested it

What a load of rubbish, everything about it was false, how could it be cheating when she was divorced. Parents (hers) don't ditch their children like that, regardless of her cheating, blood is still thicker than water

Need to make a better ending

In court with her parents and kids present, she admitted to cheating with two men "before" the divorce. She got what she deserved. She has no remorse. The holidays are going to be very lonely for a while for her.

It was fun even if incredibly far fetched

is in the comments.

Really? The readers expect legal, medical and logical perfection in a LW fantasy? Get real. Just enjoy the ride.

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I have to agree with the complaints regarding punctuation and grammar deficiencies. When the smooth reading flow is interrupted with multiple blatant errors, my score takes a dive, usually by a full star.

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I found my favorite response for the cheated husband while wifey is whining about learning her lesson/be the best wife ever/etc. ("Libby, that's great I'm so glad you see what you did was wrong. Your next husband will benefit from your experience.") Amen, brother!

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Kudos to taylorsam for a fresh plot device, but bleh! on your failed editing. Nice first draft - not ready for release. Thanks for the contribution.

Keep 'em comin'.

I think there should have been another chapter to finish it. 4 stars.

The best part of this story is...we got to see the bull shit she was throwing to make up for all of her mistakes....haaaaaaaaaaaa.........

Loved it; great story! Dlh143 complains that the story wasn't finished??? Try reading it again, bud. What more could you want? He lived happily ever after. There, does that satisfy you?

Fun tale, marred by so many typos and errors, even in the first few paragraphs, I almost didn't finish it.

The ending seems a bit blunt. It needed an epilogue where she feels true regrets for her action. Somewhere in the near future she is a wreck where no one wants or love her, and the only relationship she has are one night stands. Her name is now garbage in the community and TJ has moved on and is now traveling the world and living in a even higher income tax bracket with someone new. All fantasy per se but it would make the story ending more complete.

Not too bad but another couple paragraphs would made the ending much better. Actually the whole ending could've been extended as well. It felt really rushed at the ending there.

Possible or not this is a very creative way to do to her what she's been doing to him.

The plot itself was bit interesting. One could well understand why laws were changed to put an end to tax avoidance in this form, but it does stir some thought as about using other devices to achieve a similar aim.

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But the story was woolly, seemed not cohesive, felt unfocussed, didn't hang together, as if it had been rushed.

Sorry, no offence, -just the way it struck me, it might be an idea to do a re-write at a later date?

Once again, people: it's a QUIT claim deed, not a quick claim! Pay attention to some other items, too. Despite some irritations, a pretty good BTB.

Ending seemed a little rushed but did enjoy the story

Always love to see the cheater get what they deserve which is nothing. good story.

Ending was way too rushed, but other than that, good story

( It ended with her mom slapping Libby's face. Libby turned to Jennifer and Derrick who turned their back on their mother. None of them wanted anything to do with her after the hearing. )

Well that seems good except, You had her burned and then had to burn her more! Destroy her with her kids and family and think you will live happily ever after....

She has plenty of time to plot to find a man to go undercover and get him to get a job at her ex's business and then get him to fake a divorce to get the ex to tell how he did it and then ask which lawyer he used to do the same thing talking about loosing a lot of investment money getting them both to talk about how they did it! Now you back in court with evidence of fraud.

OR

On her daughters wedding, day she shows up and shoots her Ex husband right in front of her daughter. Right when he is walking her down the isle

Great story - lot of thought and great description of steps taken

What a load of bullshit

Nice. Some unique element in the divorce.

4/5

The spelling and grammar errors were particularly noticeable. A few typos here and there is fine but this went way beyond that.

I don't think it added to the story at all to have the lawyer advise him incorrectly that the wife would get the house. With the kids having moved out there's no reason for her to get ownership of the house, just half of the property like everything else. The company being the main asset and the possibility he'd have to liquidate it to pay her off was sufficient to make him want to find some way to avoid the normal split.

The ending, like most of the rest of the story, was of course over the top,

This plot could have made one hell if a Story, if written by GeorgAnderson or somebody.

Your concepts are great, just your style is unfortunately ( for me) lacking something. 4*only, therefore.

its funny how its a mistake for her but he's a fucking dog if he cheats

Got the wife to agree to an amicable and equitable divorce by applying to her sense of greed to use a legal tax avoidance measure. Oh, how horrible...Snark!

I am not a literary critic, so I can only say that I enjoyed the read.

[18.05.23]

They got Capone via taxes and so did he!

11/10!!!!!

Probably never happen but damn that was sooooo goooood! Burn bitch burn!!!!!

I liked it. It was a different sort of BTB, that's unusual. Like someone else said, they got Capone for tax evasion, so he got rid of her the same way. I gave it 4 stars, and thanks for sharing it with us.

Perfect.

Kind of abrupt, but not so much that it feels like a whole segment of the story is missing. I'd recommend having someone do a spelling and grammar check for you, and you should be good to go.

Fun read! 4/5 BRB

All’s fair when burning a cheating bitch. Great story.

Great story, I gave you 5 stars. Too bad such a divorce was not really legal.

This is a nice treatment of the consequences of Greed and Lust, the two perennial favorite mortal sins in LW. The "Tax Divorce" would be a perfect trap for a greedy cheating spouse

You lost me on page one. It's beyond belief that ANYONE would mistake his wife walking into a motel,well out of most people's travels and have photo to prove it. Her lying about where she had lunch seals the deal. He doesn't need more to dump her. Using this cheap device as a lead to the story bespeaks a lack of imagination.

To bad too, he otherwise weaves a pretty good story.