All Comments on 'The Temp Ch. 01'

Pretty good start. Slow burn. Well done.

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Cheers

Thanks for reading my latest story. I haven't submitted anything for a while. Certainly no erotica. I've been busy working on mainstream novels that I have released through amazon. Message me if you want to know more.

It felt good to get back to erotica. Pun definitely intended! Writing these stories lets me fantasize about the world around me and the women in it. I hope you enjoyed it!

Interesting premise.

But moves ahead too fast. Gets to her masturbation with no real preliminaries. Sex between them starts, continues, and is over in the blink of an eye.

No reciprocity at all. While he's fihgering her, doesn't she even notice the bulge in his pants. Not even a touch/squeeze of his cock.

Barely a beginning.

Four stars.

Terrific!!!! Please continue with accelerating depravity!!!!!