All Comments on 'The Thunderstorm'

Well written and believable. Good development of the story.

However, a common error of the English language showed up a couple of times:

Taught is the past tense and past participle of Teach. The word you wanted was Taut, meaning stretched tight.

No big deal...keep up the great writing!

oooohhhh my smokin HOT HOT. I beat my self off over and over

again. Gasp, pant, wheew! I wanna go out right now and suck me

some pussy.

Anonymous wrote:

"Taught is the past tense and past participle of Teach. The word you wanted was Taut, meaning stretched tight."

Sure enough! Thanks for the catch. I'll fix that!

Thanks for the positive feedback!

you can actually write. Don't limit your writing to erotica

such a beautiful story such powerful passion not realized.

A girl you had as friend is now your true love .

I had such a love and like a DICK I through it away.

I will keep this story for the power of the passion and the love it shows.

Well Done Write some more like this 1 and you have got me hooked for good!!

writing and a well written tale of first times. Passion, sensitivity and budding sensuality as they begin the grand adventure together - we should all be so fortunate

Please add more to this story. It could go on for several more chapters.

I really enjoyed your story. I usually skip male POV stories, but i am super glad I stuck with this one, it was well worth it. I especially appreciate that she was uninhibited and bold, but our protagonist never said the usual bad girl, dirty girl, slut etc.insults that are so common on here. Why bad or dirty? Sex is good for everyone, when wrapped in such beautiful affection.

Good characters, good humor, good all-around graphics. And I just don't mean the sex scenes I'm talking about the whole story. Keep on writing.

Outstanding story.