All Comments on 'The Tides Of War Pt. 07'

With an occasional editing need.

I enjoy all the background which enables me to envision these places and peoples.

only thing is you never leave a battlefield, only the last one. TK U MLJ LV NV

but your little spelling and grammar mistakes like ''kill a loin [ of pork ]with his spear , her fowls [ chickens ] foals [ horses ] will be free , has instead of as , keep going, looking forward to lots more of this fine story , alun

WHOA!! didn't see this coming. The Saga continues on a new continent!! Still a great read. I hate waiting for the next installment, but it's well worth it.

Thanks for sharing.

"Eight off the mares were in fowl, has well has six off the Kana girls and three off N'debi's women, which kept Susan busy." That must be some bitchin' rooster! Takes the concept of a big cock to a whole new level. Disappointing though, having another cuck story to contend with. Never thought the Gurka's and the Africans would be into letting their women get fucked, by a chicken? Guess Susan was busy, teaching the women how to lay eggs? Betcha Susan gives that big cock a try herself, once she gets David into the cuck thing. Maybe they'll name their first chicken-child Humpty Dumpty.

By the way, everybody saying you need some help with editing? You might want to think about it. Can be distracting.

was disappointed they left india.after all they russians werent done yet,now they have to worry about the news of their green valley getting out and every dick in the country trying to get some.

Robin, you have a wonderful imagination, along with the ability to put it all down on paper. Love the details. Love the background....could read this forever.

Thank you for sharing

Bob.

Thankyou for another great chapter. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Easily worth 5 stars.

Many typos in this one.

A story of great romance of lands and great hearts of man (that's men and woman gang)...

Look forward to much more.

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

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to anonymous; if you can't read a good story with a few typos you

you have a big problem not the author. terrific story and keep writing.

also check out "the boys in blue" also a good read.

It seems that Part 8 is missing.

"The only people you meet are the Maasia, a proud warrior like people who are Simi nomadic. The have vast herds of cattle that they live for; we found them friendly enough if you show them respect. We were told; by our guide that part off the coming of age is for a young men to kill a loin with his spear."

My check for Maasia recommended spelling it Massai. They are not Simi nomadic. semi-nomadic works. Young men kill a lion, not a loin.

This is a wonderful story that could be improved with the assistance of some proof-reading.