All Comments on 'The Trail West Ch. 04'

Not all that big on westerns but this one is good. Looking for the next chapter. Zane Grey eat your heart out.

I've really enjoyed the 4 chapters. I hope you'll keep it going for awhile.

As before,pleasekeep it up.

Lots of ways to go from here. You write a good story and put the feelings out and easy to read. Look forward to more.

Can't wait for the next chapter. I have really enjoyed this series and your others keep up the good work

keep it going, if you can... it being a character study of a story, telling about some imaginary past, of the "wild west", and how it shaped individuals, families, and different groups of people (as well as animals, since the story is about Josh the horse trainer training wild and hard to train horses for man to use to help him "tame" the wild west [from at White man's perspective, that is; for the Natives, it's not wild; it's their home for thousands of years before the arrival of the Whites who wanted to "tame" the land by carving it, fencing it, digging big and deep holes in it; cutting down millions of square miles... acts that caused Henry David Thoreau to solemnly declared he was born in the nick of time, being born between 1817, living to roughly the end of the Civil War, 1865, observing the large-ness of nature and big-ness of people and cosmopolitanism... from his small Walden Pond.... a man and an eccentric character whose eclectic thoughts influence giants like Gandhi, Mandela, and King... in subtle, hard to pin-point ways...]

My only complaint is that the author has announced that there are only

eight chapters, so we are all ready halfway through! Been a good ride

so far. though I wish that the hero would screw up now and then. It is the more normal type of learning experience!

Not so many quick POV changes to create inner dialogue. Story flow was smooth.

You should make this into a actual full book

I western raised on a horse ranch, so I claim to a very sma;; bit about what you are writing.jjYou are the first one that I can recall of (am 61) to ever mention 8-15 miles was good traveling. Now my Dad and Granddad wer knica from that era. What little I knnow come from them, Now I aint gonna tell you hit the X ring with every shot but pretty stayed in the 10 ring so as I am concerned. Damn few peoplestill dont understand men like these whose "yarning" was a way of teaching and giving information. Not all learnin should come from a book, but by the sweat of hard work

You keep on doing what you doin and dont mind the back biters, they just stroking thier own ego.

A great story , need a little historical facts as in 1862 there were no cities in Oklahoma,or in west Texas. I did enjoy it.

Just a thought, you could stack these stories in order so we could read them in order.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

with a new series telling the story of the journey north

Just a heads up but you have Josh turning 18 in two different time periods, once in Chapter 2 on the way to Fort Smith and then in this chapter on the way from Fort Smith.

In general the story is well written but you should have checked dates before writing about stopping Oklahoma City and Amarillio. Neither of those towns were established until the late 1880's.

The West was a hard place to live in. Making a mistake had a high learning curve.