by j3zza
predictable monster SciFi with role reversal
I really enjoyed this story! Thank you for the great Sci Fi angle.
But the injected "note" to the reader was jarring. It may sound ok in your head, but for others it's a nasty distraction. Besides, it's completely unnecessary.
to tell if the story is good or not, but your writing is admirable, and really hot. I cum all over my pants while reading it. Hope the rest is just as good as it is, and it would surely be a masterpiece.
A little predictable, but I really liked it. Look forward to seeing where it goes next.
well, you said it is part of a long story?
I can't wait to read the rest of it then!
It was seriously hot!
As i was reading i had to stop and put on my panties and start playing with myself .. i dream of having a pussy so i could feel a hard big cock in meeeeeeeee :) keep the story going it;s good