All Comments on 'The Truth after Seven Years Pt. 01'

Very interesting story. I like it when a story gets you to hate the bad guys and you hope the the good guys get a great revenge. Gets you wanting more. Of course, the mother, Ashley, was a selfish slut who really didn't love her husband or her kids. She wanted to be a trophy wife, and Tuck was her asshole boyfriend/new husband. What they did to the father was so cruel, especially Tuck, because his jealousy. Looking forward to the next chapter in this saga...

"But I had already spent a small fortune on Private investigators trying to locate him with no success."

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Really with what money?

According to your story he is so destitute that land and a business worth several hundred thousand dollars wrapped up in a trust and therefore immune to estate and death taxes needs to be sold so he and his sister can STILL be in debt to the IRS

Very anxious for the rest!

A good start. I look forward to seeing where it goes.

All the background was a little long for me and I still have no idea how ashley would marry and have children if she was so in love with tuck. Why not go with Tuck in the first place? She was old enough to move.

part 2 please

You got me hooked. Can't wait for the rest.

It was clearly labeled Chapter 1, but even that doesn't explain how little this story has. It's 3 pages of almost emotionless exposition describing not the actual affair and aftermath, but just the "how they met" part with almost nothing explaining the actual affair.

As a story itself its just too incomplete. I felt like nothing comes out of this other than a slight interest in the next part of the tale.

But you still have my interest....

I surely believe Stony W will finish this tale. Everybody who has read this has his or hers fantasy whetted..TK U MLJ LV NV

3*. Could easily have been cut by half with no loss.

Looking forward to the next part

Intriging and thought-provoking and a tad annoying not to know the 'punchline' So... Please continue 5***** so far and I expect the ending to be of the same standard... no pressure!

Thank You.

Putting up with a lousy wife for so long after taking her back when she dumped him for his rival?? He’s a bitch....

“Tuck was such a jerk that he never saw his kids after the divorce. Uh, which is also what my father ended up doing, partially because of taunts.”

In LW, every female sociopath is married to a standup guy. In real life, I’ve never known a selfish-minded person whose spouse wasn’t the same. I can’t help but judge your characters by the terms you’ve written for them: he married a sociopath and abandoned his kids for seven years. What a hero.

You can not have everything in a trust and then later have ownership. There was no tax problem because the trust owns it all there are just new trustees. Get your facts right and keeping that line don't change back and forth. It hurts an otherwise good story.

so where is the ending for this story it was really good but with no ending it doesn't make much of a story

excellent start! you did exactly what so many on here fail to do..... You got us invested in your characters, Tanya, the protagonist, the mother..... what will happen with them? Great ending, you hooked us in now (atleast myself) cant wait to see what happens next. Truly great start, cant wait to see what happens next

Thank you for writing. It is hard to find reading material that lets life and the world happen.

Norman Sands

Pretty good so far , so what happens next.?iwnnzj

Totally agree with LazyLoner.....

An intriguing start to the story!

I hope the father got some vicious revenge against Tuck and the slut ex-wife.

I like it. Where is the rest?

I bet he slept with his sons wife.

Even as a first chapter I found this lacking.

liked it very much ,, looking forward to the rest ,, thanks for sharing

Interesting beginning!

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I am assuming that this is part one.

Nice beginning. Can't wait to see how this story unfolds. Something about how mentions "when everything went crazy " sounds like this could be fun!

Well, I know a lot more about fictional high school football than I ever expected to learn. Damn long prologue.

3* Waaaay too much background info. I had to skip a chunk. Try again.

Wow! Love this. C'mon part 2.

Please post it so we can read it. It is a great story.

I really am looking forward to seeing the rest. I'll guess that the will will specify hidden assets and able to save the farm. Maybe if will also go 100% to Jake (His sister deserves little or none of it ( i.e. 1 - 5 % only). Hopefully the dad did get some serious revenge against Tuck and his slut ex-wife. And lastly, hopefully things are protected just in case Jake's marriage blows up.

Intriguing.

What a beginning. Up there will all the best stories. Now you have my / our attention, it's going to be hard waiting for the next shoe to fall.

Rolando1225, the rest of the story will be in subsequent parts. Hence, the "Pt. 01" in this story's title. How soon the new parts come out is a very different question especially since this is first multi-part story from this author. Looking forward to how he approaches this.

Damn it, if he was going to go dark... wish he'd finished off the good for nothing Tuck on his way out. Looking forward to hearing the rest of the story... Thanks for your hard work.

Nice cliff-hanger, everyone will be seeking Pt 2 soonest! You kept on saying just before dad disappeared things went crazy, well I'm sure it was to Tuck & the bitch. Will be interesting where this goes. 5* Hooyah, salute!

It just makes me skip over paragraph after paragraph describing events and people and episodes that add nothing to the story or the plot. I suspect you are doing your best, but its very tedious, slow, and puzzling.

Apparently the husband was a complete dufuss who couldn't discern what an empty selfish monster his wife was. So he got what he married, so it serves him right. He should have married an average down to earth sincere woman who would love him and be loyal till the day they died. The basic plot is that stupid men get fucked over by beautiful soulless bitches. Did this guy grow up on a deserted island? He should have known better.

I will wait to rate the completed story. Thanks for the effort.

3 pages? Really? You could have told this story in 1 and a half pages. Remember, quality over quantity. You thought more is better, big mistake. I've given you a solid 2 so far. Let's see what Ch2 is like. QUALITY is preferable to QUANTITY.

CHUCK.

Please finish,story so far very good but the suspense is -----------

No, the Trust would have needed to have been set up/established BEFORE the marriage or the assets used to settle it would be classed as matramonial assets if done AFTER. Most Loving Wives writers no nothing about how Trusts operate but at least you attempt to do so. The Trust didn't die. It is a separate entity. So the whole death duties issue is moot. The two children would simply have been listed as beneficiaries along with the remaining uncles aunts if the kids share totals 60%. The Trustees would have changed the salary and maintaince duties over to the son. If the Trust was unable to operate as a "going concern" (ie not profitable) that's a separate issue again. It was probably set up as a Discretionary Trust so his sister cannot simply demand payouts. That's up to the Trustees.

Remember, if the father has now been declared dead after 7 years, the Will comes into play BUT only deals with assets HE owned. NOT the Trust assets.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter to see how you dealt with the legal issues. Plus the payback/revenge. Cheers.

The story kept my interest, but the grammatical errors are very distracting.

I think normally LW stories have way to much exposition ("Let me tell you how we met..." etc) but because this came from the son's point of view, it felt different. It was also written in a way that provided suspense, not just unneeded background. Nice work, looking forward to part 2.

Very good can't wait for the rest of the story.

I really hope there is more to follow

Great start to your story, you've got my interest. I'm hoping Dad had to disappear because he took Fuck out permanently. Hopefully, something bad overalls cheating wife and mother also. She's a nasty bitch bitch , as well as cheating whore. You're on to something here, keep the intensity going and don't make us wait too long please.

This is a really good story. I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Yes, it is a great start...

But man, does this story needed an editor!

Good plot, with some glaring grammatical mistakes.

Still in it... 'could have been so much better than how it turned out, though.

Almost an entire page of football? I get it, Mike hates Tuck. The background can be reduced to half a page. The exwife is a bitch that would be half a page. Background and description is necessary for character development but it's so slow and rather repetitive

a lotof Family history and football gameshope the next part will increase erotic

with too much details I didn't care about

...Word be no more that how long it takes you to take a crap on the toilet, then I suggest you consider only taking cereal boxes into the John -- Frosted Flakes probably would be good for you as you convene an intellectual bond with Tony the Tiger. Idiot.

A new low in pathetically stupid.

After going through pages and pages of the bitterness and hatred between Husband/ father and Tuck... When the wife of finally tells him and that she loves talk more and that you going to go to war to hurt him and humiliate him even more... The main character reacts with emotional justification.

And the father husband is consoling his wife who is just finished telling him how much she hates his guts and is out to destroy him?

Well developed. I’m looking forward to the next part. Thanks for sharing.

Hope ending is better.

Give it up or read?!

jtwheels

Onward to part 2

I CAN ONLY HOPE THIS QUALITY STORY IS MAINTAINED. SO ON TO THE NEXT CHAPTER.

Great opening chapter.

Far far far too much backstory. I like the plot but the flow is excruciatingly slow

Short storyline I looking forward to Pt 02. Thanks for the long read.

Good buildup, except I don't really buy the Tanya bit. In my experience, father-daughter relationships are usually a lot more uncomplicated than mother-daughter relationships, which have their fair share of friction along with the affection. Especially in this case where the dad is the good parent and the mom is a selfish narcissist, it doesn't quite ring true why Tanya would abandon her dad and side with her mom for no good reason.

Ah, Harry, Harry...what have they done to ya, me boy? Ya was such a lively lad, full of light and laughter...such a loss, it is, to us all.

Well told, Stoney, well written. Thank you for the story.

LWlurker

Nice

Tremendous start. I can't wait to see what he did.

Five Stars

Love the football, but hated Tuck and the cheating bitch mother.

Good tale, forge ahead. LP

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He brought a lot of the trouble on himself by getting back with the bitch in the first place, anyone with half a brain would have told her to fuck off

Way, way too much time and effort on the football backstory, it is really not relevant. This desperately needs editing and proofreading, eg, "I always tried to be a good father, but I know that I failed miserably I disappeared." makes no sense. I have no patience for authors who do not care enough to proof. or have some of the many volunteers here, proof their writing.

So far, so good. Awaiting more of the story and for revenge on the Evil Doers.

As a UK reader, I found the long winded descriptions of American football games as bewildering as listening to millennials chuntering on about on line gaming. This could have been done in half the space it took if the author hadn't fallen into the age old trap of padding it out with lots of tedious, unnecessary, irrelevant detail about things of no real interest. However, when he concentrated on the important details it was a good read.

Interesting story but way too much back story.

Great story, like it a lot . AAAAA+++++

Shithead Jake should open the envelops before overthinking!!

His father was stupid and dumb in his obsession over Ashley so he deserved the shit...he should have grown some balls

Oh, too much back history about the games, his father and Tuck.....could have summarised

Interesting story.

Where other comments aren't happy with the amount of time spent on his Dad's highschool football career. I enjoyed that part but, did have issue with some of the details. There's no such thing as a center linebacker. It would either be a middle linebacker or an inside linebacker depending on the defensive scheme the team used. Also with his Dad throwing for over 400 yds in each game that was detailed there's no way the team was only scoring 24 or 27 points. At the highschool level if a QB throws for 400+ yds they're probably scoring in excess of 40 points.

This Femdom agitprop belongs in the Loving High School Football category.

Much as I like the plot so far much to much backstory I nearly gave up at the end of page 1

I understand that we need some back story to understand where the story is going, but it was almost too much. I had to skim through a lot of it, hope the rest of the story is a little more on point. Looking forward to see what's up with Mike and what he did.

good story really enjoyed it but felt you spent too long on the football still a solid 5 from me

Hard to put this down. Gripping story

Damn fine story and very well done, thank you! 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

Couldn't help but feel that the dad was an obvious cuck, that he took up with someone who's actions had warned him. His lack of taking responsibility is quite typical of such weak people. Worse of all he poisoned his sons mind and turned him into a cuck too. Just hope the son had his kids dna tested because they're definitely not his, and I wouldn't be surprised to find out they're also Tucks.

Ditto what RanDog025 posted.