All Comments on 'The Truth is in the DNA'

Great story! I'm glad the two of you collaborated since PT rarely allows comments or scores.

5

Nice. No real pathos, but nice.

Heartwarming story. Thanks very much

I enjoyed your story. Wel paced, characters were real.

Always love an enjoyable life like story especially from two of my favorite writers!

It is not inconceivable (pun intended) that the younger Derek soon has a sibling.

It is not inconceivable (pun intended) that the younger Derek soon has a sibling.

Great story from two of my favorite authors!

A romance! Good job!

Thank you both for a really good tale, being that there were two of you we should have been able to give it a ten - sorry, guess we have to settle for 5stars.

somewhere east of Omaha

Katherine seems like an incredibly selfish piece of sh*t to be honest....

Really good story but it seemed to be missing something. It wasn't thrilling, was not emotive, not exciting. You're both really great authors, I follow both of you, but this story fell, oddly, flat. I'd give it 5 stars but that option wasn't possible.

Bottom line, this story feels like a prologue, an introduction to a thrilling story.

Nice work guys. 5*

Nice job. The writing is very technically correct and the story line believable and entertaining. Thank you both for your efforts

Two things. It was weird that she said they'd have to go back to their own rooms after sex. Why? Neither are married.

Second, it was missing a bit of emotion in the story, esp since the father was basically cheated out of raising his son. Just , oh i think i still love her, and of to the races.

I have caught KC135's out of Beale quite often. They can be cold and miserable, but much preferable to a cattlecar 747. This story resonated.

This was so cool

DG Hear & Papatoad working together is always going to be some good stuff. Thanks for sharing and I hope you do more joint stories.

Interesting and well-plotted and written, but kinda bloodless. There's a detachment here that keeps me from really getting emotionally involved -- perhaps it's because it's all denouement, as after the initial DNA reveal there's really nothing terribly surprising or involving. There's really no conflict in the story, everyone's "nice" and the story walks forward as logically as walking from your house directly to your car. It's pretty much the last line in the story -- life goes on.

"Comments welcome"...

A minor nitpick...it is written as KC-135, you forgot the hyphen.

Nice story.

Hard to believe this was a Papatoad story. 5/5

im guessing DG did the ending lol since toad doesnt do endings. i liked it a bit wish it had more details though everything was vague. that being said it is an erotic coupling story so doesnt really need details just 2 ppl erotically coupling. which i guess they did but even that was vague

Good work, you two! If this is what you can do together, perhaps you might do it more often?

Red white and blue to you. Thank you. Being a dad...I relate.

Wonderful story...

5🌟s

Fred

Loved the story! Thank you!

Absolute loved it. Thanks

Damned good story

Absolutely wonderful, another winner from this author. 5/5

Wow... not really like either one of you normally write. Good story. I usually like a little more angst but happy endings are fun too

She knew it was his child but never told him, even after her husband died!?!? Then they get back together and it's instant love. Doesn't feel real.

What a cunt

Not a real story. I almost can believe she did not want to burden him when he was 19, even though she had enough money to raise the child if they were married.

Then she did not contact him when her husband died, or at least try to meet him once to feel the water.

And everybody knew, so it wasn't even a big sicret.

She's too passive for my taste.

Storytelling is too stilted, and not fleshed out. Story was okay, but not the telling of it. Should have been three pages.

I loved the concept for this story, but actual writing was somewhat stilted. It really needed to be more robust with more father- son interaction. Further, there didn't seem to be any emotions coming out during the tale.

Good story but I never thought that stories Papatoad was involved with ended well? And I know for certain he never allowed voting or comments.

Good. Concept, but the execution was really dry.

Unusual, but a very nice finish. I like this author.

Kudos to both PapaToad and your editor. This story was a definite Trifecta!