All Comments on 'The Twelfth of Never Ch. 01'

Sexy and romantic.

Your first erotic story went very well, in my opinion. I look forward to the next chapter, and to future stories. :)

While it may be your first erotic story, you earned 5 stars from me. Fortunately, your previous writing taught you how to write! Awaiting the next chapter...I just hope it doesn't take too long!

A lovely story, can't wait for chapter 2!

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The story started a little disjointed and all over as far as time line. Once it came together it was quite nice and the sex is so hot. Keep going.

I just loved it! I can't wait for the next chapter. Please don't keep me waiting too long. So delicious.

A good start to a lovely story. Looking forward to chapter 2

What a lovely, well written story. So erotic. Can't wait for next part.

Thanks for the encouraging comments. I've submitted Chapters 2 & 3 already but as I sent them as Word documents we'll probably have to wait for them to be formatted. As soon as they appear, I'll submit my second story. At the moment, I'm working like fury on the third. I'm completely ignorant about formatting for this site so I'd be grateful if somebody could explain to me how it's done (in simple language please, I'm a bit of an idiot when it comes to technical matters). Thanks again.

Sorry folks---I've just found out that for unexplained reasons, Chapters 2 & 3 have been rejected. I can't think why unless it's because one character is a 12-year-old who might have viewed something sexual. I'll do some rewriting and try again as soon as possible.

She's 50ish and fat. Really? Fat shaming is offensive.

I recommend dumping the prologue. The back story for the characters is rambly and so far seems unnecessary to the main plot. Other than that, nicely written, you fall into a good pace quickly as do the characters.

I thought this was a well written story, however the choice of the movie could have been better ( not one of tom hanks better movies, in my opinion) other than that it was pretty good

I've read this story several times now, but I always enjoy it. Thanks for sharing it with us!

I had to chuckle a bit when I read "you'll have to wait for the sex" in the intro notes and yet there was sex by the end of the first page.

This is a stop on my pilgrimage through the collected works of Maonaigh. Delighted to come cross the first of your Literotica submissions. Your magnanimous heart shines through.

Emma got this joker card, for the lucky life time .... Adopted and loved, stepsister and loved, work quality and loved for, big bang love ...... Everybody should expereince such luck

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