All Comments on 'The Twins' Plan'

Amazingly well written story. You have gone strength to strength from your first story. Keep up the good work. Thank you!

Not a complaint; just a personal preference: consanguinamory does not share, maybe something to explore down the line, perhaps?

Please let there be more to this story.

Wow!!! Usually multi chapter stories have highs and low from chapter to chapter but you kept us on the edge the whole story. Can't wait for what happens next!

not very well written

Fantastic! I absolutely LOVED the dialogue in this story. Very original too.

Well written and analyzed, thumbs up

What’s the last part of the plan?

first off the anon from below is an idiot and dont know good writing. This was a really great story, very hot and id love to see whats next for all of them. like if they will all have twins of their own, how they will survive and live all together!! Whats next for them?

We need more to the store please very hot story

Great! Loved it. More, please!

More sex scenes would be much better ;)

Writing was really great, but I really wish that group sex was tagged.

5* A really good story! I enjoyed it thoroughly. The writing was excellent too. One or two things I caught, for example the sentence: "What didn't his sister not want him to know about Ashley?" It is way too complex to keep the flow going. I'd suggest something like: "What did his sister not want him to find out about Ashley?" or "What secret didn't she want him to find out?". And I do feel that some of the sex scenes were rushed and left without some visual detail. Personally, I would've kept from getting them all pregnant so soon, opening up a second chapter nicely. But, still really good writing and the build up really got the tone for the emotions right.

Great buildup loved it

One of the few stories I would like to give more than 5 stars. I never felt bored, even without any sex scenes. I hope the is a next part with his Plan

Loved it.

A well-written story with an interesting twist. The end was disappointing, knocked-up teens is not very erotic, and if they were so smart, they'd keep taking their pills.

Good story, but having everyone pregnant at the end really ruined it for me. Why the teenage moms with babies?

Great story. Abortion and after pills aren't sexy

It was fine but 'till the pregnancy crap started. Three kids in high school all pregnancy and by the same guy and no job, no skills and no future. Blah.

4 18 y/o's, with 3 of them pregnant you needed a lot better ending than this. I really like the story, including the pregnancies, but you needed to finish this story. Very disappointing ending.

This is really good needs a part 2

It's a great story, a part 2 would be really nice.

I loved the story and its buildup but like other commenters I wasn't too thrilled about the teen pregnancies. My alt. ending would have been for Aiden to drive all of them to the city where all three would be attending the same uni. He will then present to them an empty one (large) bedroom apartment and ask them to plan for their future together. This would be possible since he has a great paying summer job that would be part-time during school. This option will also lend the author the option for creating sequels. Overall still love the story.

I'm glad I finally read this! My fetishes are a bit more in line with yours I think, and I was very happy with the romantic teen pregnant incest ending. I'll have to keep an eye out for your stuff in the future because you can really write. Characters were fun and the dialogue flowed, and even with how veiled the plan was I never thought it was especially hard to read between the lines as far as what was going on with it. It would have been nice to see a bit more of Ashley and for her to have had a chance to stand out as her own character once she was fully in the plot, and I would have liked to see something romantic between Hannah and Madison as they moved into a space of being more than just best friends, but I understand if there were length concerns already given how easy it is to lose the audience on this site. I hope you keep writing because this was fun!

This was really well-written, but as someone once said, incest doesn't share. It would've been better if he had only got with his sister, IMO. Also, the cliffhanger would be fine, if there was a sequel coming. When can we expect one?

I want that as an audiobook.

With music by Scott Joplin...

The triple knock up wasnt my fave but solid all the way otherwise

Okay, so you definitely pushed my buttons with this one. But Madison should have been his first and not Hannah. Then Ashley should have been the first to get pregnant out of the three, followed by her sister Hannah then Madison.

I absolutely loved this story though because of Madison's devotion to her brother. Her deeply abiding love beyond a sisterly affection clearly shines through. Sharing the love of her life with her two closest friends is really going all out for the full measure of devotion.

I don't follow very many authors here, but with both of the stories that you have published here getting solid fives from me, I just had to add you on. 5/5

I liked it. I liked the harem element. To combat the whiners.

Fantastic writing.

Fantastic story. Would love to see how their lives play out.

5 *'s This story just begs for the next chapter!

This was wasn't very good. The whole plot was weird...

For only your second story, this was excellent, although it ended somewhat abruptly to me...5 stars!!

So what does happen next?

Excellent! I can't wait to see what happens next.

I really liked your first story. The writing was superb.

This one was even better with a really good plot and some good action with the mud run and hot sex scenes.

But, there's a massive exception to this praise with the introduction of the triple pregnancy!

MY FUCKING GOD!!!

I know this is a fictional story, but the concept of a teenaged kid just out of high school, and immediately stuck with supporting three girls with children is nothing short of horrifying!

If that were me, I'd never get an erection or have sex ever again, as my genitalia would detach themselves from my body and catch the next bus to Antarctica and hang out with a tribe of emperor penguins while leaving my empty brainless person at home to deal with the fallout of my "impressive sexual conquests".

Granted, they are all gorgeous, so the news isn't all bad, as Aiden will be having more delicious sex than he ever thought possible, in tightly scheduled nightly increments.

1. Madison at 8:45 after changing 17 diapers.

2. Ashley at 9:30 after another 9 diapers.

3. Hannah at 11:40 during the tonite show monologue while Madison and Ashley vacuum up vomit from the kitchen floor.

4. Calamine lotion after a good penile pressure washing at 11:50.

I'm guessing that all four of them will move to some welfare housing together after their parents disown them, maybe even sharing one twin size bed in supreme comfort, with all 33 of their annoying screaming and smelly little tax exemptions in a second room ruining the carpet as they learn to use a litter box and accept the concept that eating your sibling's feces is bad, and that artwork sustains better when created with acrylic paints.

Sincerely,

B4PW.