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All Comments on 'The Unfolding Ch. 01'

by mtwain4u

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Just beautifully written

Congratulations. Up with the best erotica I've read.

bearsladybearsladyalmost 10 years ago

Well written and erotic. Do we get to see what his new plans are?

b4urisb4urisalmost 10 years ago
excellent. an unassuming and seductive story

well developed, and it draws the reader in nicely.

TrixareforkidsTrixareforkidsalmost 10 years ago
Very nice.

Deliciously erotic. Keep it coming. ; )

SoleBrotherJeffSoleBrotherJeffover 9 years ago
Very Well Written 5 Stars

Loved the description of the characters & their feelings.

I can't wait to read more about them.

My only nitpicking comment is about the car. On page 1 it is described as a Mercedes SL550 Roadster. But on page 2 as they are arriving back at the hotel it is described as a Porsche.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Awesome!

Really enjoyed this story.

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