All Comments on 'The Vassal Academy Ch. 13'

This is the best so far. You must read the entire series. Hope this continues into the triple digits. It is only getting better and better.

The story is developing nicely, really a lot of room for development and hopefully this might even turn into something of a novel length. Only complain is some minor editing problems in this chapter. Well done!

Best yet, although I'm loving the whole series. You are a very talented writer with an amazing imagination. Keep up the good work...I can't wait to read what happens next!

Charlotte and Crystal Mackenzie are the same person. I absolutely love your series aside from the name errors. It was the same for Roberta and Rebecca. Maybe getting an Editor would be good? It seems a shame to have small hiccups in such great reading

@Annon -- Charlotte and Crystal Mackenzie are not the same person. SavannahMann does make this sort of mistake a lot, but not this time.

I wonder what happened to SavannahMann. He stopped writing a long time ago. I have emailed him and offered to edit the whole story for him so he can repost it, but got no answer. Too bad, I really love this story.

I am very confused as to why you intersperse the names Rebecca and Roberta for the same person? Did I miss something early on when she was being introduced?