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by HungryJoe

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HB1965HB1965over 13 years ago
Well Done

Your use of language, the way you describe events, is quite capitvating. I can easily picture the action. I'm hard pressed to say how you could do this better accept to say that a little more build up to the main event might be good. Tease your audience a bit.

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