All Comments on 'The Villa Ch. 14'

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AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

Quite well written. Too much repetitive anatomical detail. Better if you leave a bit more to the imagination. Mussels are shellfish. Waste is stuff you throw away. What human bodies have is muscles and a waist. A few other mistakes in grammar and punctuation.

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