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by MaxKrueger

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OdiouserOdiouserabout 2 years ago

almost error free, nicely done.

much suspense. the one improvement I might suggest is that you pay more attention to paragraph length. you move from single sentence para's to ones a full screen in length. a trivial nit but might be more important as you move into longer stories with some actual characterizations and story line.

An interesting first effort, welcome to the fold. Keep 'em coming.

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I am the author of the Max Krueger Adventures series of erotic action and adventure fiction, which currently includes "Hotter than Hades", "Shadow of the Devil", "Lucifer Rising" and "Voyage of the Demon". My books are available from Amazon sites worldwide.