All Comments on 'The Ward Ch. 02'

Hopefully for poor Edmund's sake her reticence doesn't originate from a desire to hide that she is, in fact, the crone. It would, of course, be wise of her to hide this from him till after the annulment of their marriage. I hope he is gentlemen enough to realise that every face deserves a fair chance and that a book has to have a cover. Thanks for story! I think I'm in love with Nicky-boy.

I love this story. I can’t wait to see who her guardian is, and I love Edmund. What happens next? Yay!

Some nice progress in the relationship between Sage and Edmund. The adversary has arrived and proves to be as odious as previously inferred

Often a phrase or a comment of insight are indications of the author's skill and attention to the era in which teh story is placed.

"The Master casts his net to an empty lake,”

"My Lord, he would know it regardless. Maintain the charade with him, if you will. But there is no need to enact the reality."

These two little snippets of dialogue show just how much effort Bellie444 puts into her work.

Don't keep us in suspense. Keep them coming.

looking forward to more.

I am so impressed by the way your writing has matured. While you've always had great characters I found earlier stories scattered and a bit disconnected. This not only seems more focused but written in a more polished manner. I'm really looking forward to this journey with you. What a great start to this story so far. By your rapidly improving talent, I'll bet you'll be joining the countless other authors now published who also got their start here.

I just don't like this genre of writing, but I am nevertheless captivated and eager to learn what happens! That's the sign of a good writer. I love the mystery of her guardian. Five stars, yet again. Thank you, Bellie! -- JB

Despite the delightful romantic nature of the story I can only be grateful that I’m a woman of the 21st Century! Even the first half of 20th century wasn’t a picnic.

This could be set pretty much anywhere between the Middle Ages and the 18/19th C. although personally I’m leaning towards 18/19th C. particularly given Edmund’s comment about witchcraft. Great attention to detail.

You’ve definitely left some tantalising clues to keep everyone hooked. Thanks for sharing.

Tess

Edmund made her wear chains and treated her as if she were a slave supposedly because he intended his nemesis to believe he owned her to save her. There was this big production about it until Joel stressed to Edmund that he could have treated her with respect while simply telling the non-present nemesis that she was a slave. Then when the big moment comes with the nemesis where he is supposed to save her by acting as if he has absolute claim to her, he says she is simply his guest? This invalidates the entire premise of treating her as he has to this point. I’m unimpressed. I usually am impressed by your stories. Not this one so far.

A very absorbing story. Looking forward to the relationship of these to developing. Bravo.