All Comments on 'The Warrior Ch. 05'

Thank you for resuming the story.

Hey great to see that your back and still in fine form. I went back and reread the whole story so far before i read this chapter and I must say you haven't lost your way with them yet. Keep up the good work and I'll wait for the next installment when you have it ready.

I read this chapter, the first I've stumbled across of your work. And then I went back and read the first four. Please keep writing!! You definitely have a fan here.

thnx you so much for coming back. Please dont leave us for hanging for so long again.

Though I would prefer not to have to wait that long again! Love the story, I had to go read 1-4 again and I thought the characters stayed true to themselves. I absolutely adore your characters, they are strong and complex. Can't wait for more!

please keep submitting these stories. I dont think i can wait a year for the next one

Please continue the story! I can't wait for you to finish it. It's so hot and fascinating at the same time. Got me wet like anything...

I loved that your story had a plot as well a AMAZING sex scenes. It is very rare to find a story on here with an involved and detailed plot but it makes the story so much better. Please write more!!

Please give us more!!!!

I love this story & I'm dying to read some more - please continue it.

U can't leave us all hanging like this.....we need more!!!

:)

this is an amazing story and i love all the characters, i only just read all of them so i didnt have to wait for this chapter but i would prefer not to have to wait! i want more!

B xxx

What there is of it anyway. Please write more soon!

Seems like the sex for every chapter was there just for reading pleasure, not for actual character need or something. Sometimes it looks like it can be done without, but I don't really mind. I'm glad to see though that the storyline is moving. It would be interesting to see just what all of this means to the Warrior. Maybe it will come later, maybe it will come soon, but I hope it does not get forgotten as an important part of his character. Hope to read more updates.

Perfect again.

Ok I know this was written in 08, but I really truely hope that you are still working on this story line... I really like how it is your own style of writting!! Hope more is going to come!!!

I really hope you continue the story I have been watching it for two years! Please please please I want to know what happens.

You never finished it?

But, I would prefer more words applied to the story and plot and not so much to the sex.

Have you lost interest? Have the trolls perhaps stolen your love for telling a tale by their tasteless abuse? I for one, was enjoying this story. Yet you have added nothing to your site since 2014! How sad. I hope you will return.

Sincerely,

THE Infamous Anonymous

This is such a great story, It really is a shame it’s destined to be an unfinished work.

These are my unsolicited suggestions if your stuck in your storyline.

1- Less Sex. Their sex is amazing but too much of the chapters is taken up by their trysts.

2- More Character development. It might be easier to do longer chapters (maybe 5 pages?) and allow your characters to grow.

3- It feels like maybe you felt pressured into chapter 5. I’m curious what your thoughts are for the development of the officer, or if you wrote yourself into a corner. If it’s the latter, is there a way to remove chapter 5 and edit it. Where the reader is not left at a point of confusion at the end of the story.

Hope I came as as critiquing and not critical. I do enjoy your work. I hope you reread this story and fall back in love with it.

Sincerely, A fan