by VictorBlum
I think my biggest prob is at the beginning. Spelling and writing.
Fear not, I did read it all and will likely read it again.
Good, hot story. As others have said, spelling and grammar could be better. Keep at it.
Why didn't Carsten go to live with his own mother after his father died???
It was a good story. The 1930 part made no sense. But between spell check and an editor, it could be a top story.
i loved the story she had experience and he has the rather large cock to please her with. knowing that size of a penis does not really have to be 4.5-5.0 "
Just put more time into editing for you had a few obvious errors. That aside the story was hot!
Why would you need to have the stepson in the story instead of the real son?
Could it be that you are not comfortable in this genre and so think that as long as it is a stepson and thus not related by blood, it would be OK???
If so then may be you should select another genre for your work.
The sex was hot but I was confused right at the beginning of the story about when it was taking place. The author said something about the husband coming to this country in 1930 to escape Nazi Germany. Then he mentioned online porn. Huh? And how did the stepson's cock go from being about the same size as his late father's to being some massive thing she had never experienced before?
well-written for its plot line-good hot sex-nice characters thanks
At least it was a good storyline, but the spelling & gramatical errors dropped you from a 4 to a 3. Please get an editor.