All Comments on 'The Women of My Life Ch. 01'

Someone else should have proof read this before you posted it

One can only assume that English is a second language for you. If you desire to write in English, then you should either study the language more assiduously or find someone who is knowledgeable enough to correct the grammar, word usage and spelling.

I couldn't finish the story because I had to interpret it as I went along.

While the premise is good, I stopped reading after a couple of pages for the simple reason that your grammar is atrocious. I understand that english may not be your native tongue, but if that is the case get someone who knows english and have them proofread your stories before you submit them.

don't let the people who are critics for erotica give you a bad taste for writing.keep trying and work something out.let them that stop reading look over your work or shout the hell up.

For a first story, not bad at all. Don't quit writing.

I assume that English is not your first language, and maybe not your second or third. Don't worry, it will improve with practice. Maybe a friend could proof-read for you?

So what if the English is not perfect? Many of the stories on Literotica wouldn't pass Elementary-School English exams, and are in desperate need of proof-reading and editing. In a pinch, I could attempt a story in either French or German, but if I did as well as you, I would be tickled pink (look that up in a good dictionary).

Don't let the critics get you down.

Aurelian

Story content was good, but composition was almost unreadable. I gave up after the first page. Try again.