All Comments on 'The Yearning'

just a couple of things to point out, I dont feel the buildup was enough with learning about the characters, also a question if all characters are of legal adult age how is she only 39? having him at 11? if there is reason behind this then should definitely provide explanation that being said it was a good read had a few spelling errors but not anything to terrible

Please check your Math! If Mom is 39 and her son is 18 she had him when she was 21, not 11!

On a high note your description of giving oral is spot on. BUT it's unlikely a VIRGIN would do it like that for his first time even with instruction. If your reply would be he learned it from porn I say BS because most oral in porn is not done like that. Also proof read very carefully before clicking submit. Not sure why but after I copy and paste my stories format is changed here and there and even the spelling of words are modified. If you proof read the mistakes I saw can be found for next time.

But since you know how to eat a pussy I have to give you 5 stars but let's be honest, a virgin would not know those tricks the first time.

Some grammar mistakes but the story is well written. For someone who has yet to be with a woman he was a little too knowing? Perhaps another chapter? Continue to develop the characters.

Nicely done first submission. Please keep writing.

The story was good, reasonably written, but.... Twice you used "lured" wnem you meant lurid. And once you used waste when you wh.en you meant waist. PLEASE be more carful in the futurer, or consider a proofreader/editor. Thank you.

Nice but was there some reason he didn't use that seven inches to titilate his mothers lovely cunt?

Don't let the negative nannies get to ya, I for one really enjoyed your writing and creativity. Well done! I hope you'll write more!!

An excellent first submission, but it is cruel to leave us hanging. I want to read about the son's first time with his mom!

Really good,hope you continue to publish stories like this.

I fucking hate teasing stories!! If I ran this site, this story would be rejected....

Legallysane is a moron and should be put to death, well done on your story

hate unfinished stories. Also she has a waist not a waste