All Comments on 'The Young Mage Ch. 03'

i don't think he will be so restrained when it comes to the people who have his sister.

Brilliant. Again. Next please. NOW 🤓🤓

Ahhh, once again, thanks for posting. A worthy tale. Thanks.

Breath taking . More, please.

Great adventure. Thanks.

I'm really enjoying the Magnus journey. Very well written and well crafted. Thank you for posting this adventure.

Wow superb chapter, cant wait for the next one !!!

The first couple of chapters held some promise, but this has started to fall apart. The characters aren't developing, despite you throwing tens of thousands of words at it. Also, the sexual content is entirely derivative. Don't just say that a character moves "sensually", you need to learn how to describe the movements to us and let the readers see it for themselves. Saying "he kissed her passionately" is the same. Describe it to us, if you're able to. You're coming across like a bad writer, one who's incredibly lazy to boot.

Great story. Keep writing. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Thank you for the feedback. The next chapter finally goes beyond what was previously posted.

Great development. The storyline and characters are interesting. The plot well planned and fun to watch unfold. It is a pleasure reading you works. I can tell Magnus will battle with the evil inside him. I do expect/pray he does not succumb. Thank you!!

More excellent work. You are a top-notch writer, and it is easy to immerse oneself into the world you have built without being distracted at having disbelief enter the equation. I very much look forward to the next chapter(s).

Love this series, hopefully more to follow soon?

Love your work. Hoping you are planning a long running series. I also really love that your works are more story than sex. It is the definition of erotica by allowing the reader to discover and enjoy the characters facets. Instead of two randos bumping private’s.

FANTASTIC!!!