All Comments on 'Things Happen at a Halloween Party'

Good story. I liked it. Write some more

Great story, hope you will do a second chapter with Carol joining the fun!

Wonderful story!!! I hope there will be more!!

I thought the story was good just maybe fresh out things a little more it was pretty predictable so let me throw in some red herrings or something to spice it up a bit

Using "speech marks" would help differentiate speech from narative text & make reading slightly easier. A fun story but i know its Tammys house so she can walk around naked if she likes but while the party is still going on? Maybe needed a bit more explaination there, ditto for the 2nd guy turning up.

I just love Halloween stories. TY

I liked it. You should have slowed it down as it felt rushed with quick dialog which took me out of the story. You have a lot to work with in case you wanted to make multiple chapters and put in some characters that have more of a backstory which is something your main characters needed as well. I like your style and attention to deal with a very good descriptive style which really helped the story. I look forward to getting into more of your work as I am sure it will only get better.

You said that Carol is your girl friend in the beginning of the story. But told the cop that the car was owned by you and your wife. Was Carol your wife or your girl friend?