All Comments on 'Thinking Outloud'

jerk off to if you're a guy

Very easy reading erotica ,it needs a part two,which I am sure you have considered.

Learn the difference between a CROTCH and a crouch.

Many grammatical errors, particularly with homophones, but overall it was a good, quick easy story with lots of different sex scenes. Getting unrelated people to accept the act is always a turn-on in the fantasy too. Can't wait for part 2, and Taylor definitely needs to get involved. Maybe at least allude to her dabbling herself. The story is pure fantasty, might as well go all-out, right?

sex is what this site is suppose to be about and not english 101.thanks for your stories.

<p>This story had the fastest pacing of any I have read. There were some slightly distracting typos but it was the pacing and the complete lack of characterization and motivations that made this story little more than an outline.</p>

<p>The sex scenes, while somewhat graphic, were too short. The description of these women was almost non-existent. You say that Beth was thin, but mention it only once. As for Tracy, Taylor and his mother we have no descriptions. Are they tall, short, curvy, small, redhead, long haired, or short haired? All we know is that they are eager for sex.</p>

<p>The narrator moves from woman to woman as if they were can goods on a shelf. There is no feeling or semblance of feeling...not even lust. This was a poor stroke story and not the least bit erotic!</p>

Man you have to continue, awesome story,

use a good editor and forget spell checker it only tells if the word is spell right not if you used the right word this would have been a very good story if you used a good editor way to many wrong words,missing words extra words and miss spelled wordsdo a rewrite and put it through a good editor and NEVER EVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRST

for God's sake make sure your own is correct!

this needs to be slowed down, take your time and give better details. we need to know more about the people and you need to make us care about them. getting the sisters freind involved happened to fast as did getting the mom involved. this needs to be two or three times longer.

expand the story...

id like to hear about the mom/son and how it goes from there. i do agree that the speed of the story needs to slow down a bit. but i do enjoy it.

Shameful!!! Absolutely heartless!!! Virginity seals a man and woman together for life. Keep that brother and sister together for life!!!

Well I would say , cheating with mom is not a bad thing. But he has his sister and a girlfriend. he maybe taking on more then he knows. good read.........LAROC OF AGES

That's his mother talking to her son Phil, in this excellent story by an accomplished author. How many boys do you think would love to hear their mom say that to them? And how many moms secretly feel the same way Phil's mother feels about her boy? For a lady of mature years, what her son's got between his legs--his stiff young prick and his hot young balls--are indeed magical. Her mommy-hole's been shamefully neglected, she hasn't had a really hard cock up there in many years. For mothers like that, their very fit boy's got the perfect answer. His big prick is the hardest around and his young balls never quit. He's got the youthful energy and strength to give his mother the best fucks of her life. Why should a mother ever deprive herself of this joy? For the sake of an idiotic taboo that's obsolete and fading fast? Phil's already fucked his sister, sticking his fat dick up her sweet slit and blowing his brotherly balls up his sis's cute little twat, so ridiculous taboos don't scare this bold lad. This boy's got more than enough creamy semen in his young balls for both his mother's and his sister's thirsting cunts. Too many boys are sadly condemned to jerking their dick all the time, when up the family twats is where their big doses of sperm belong.

great story would love a continuation =>

My, my.... Such a Delightful time had by all. While reading, page one, kept getting suspicious about their mother seemingly watching from the sidelines.... just knew, and expected that the Other Shoe would “drop” before much longer. Ha ! Mom was even more clever, than I expected. And more enticing with what she really wanted. And, as punishment, please..... could Life actually be as blissful in Reality ? Must be nice, in the Land of Fiction..... Thank you, again. Every story was different, but exciting. Please continue to write more. Nicely Done ! *H*.

Very funny and hot