All Comments on 'Thirsty for Her'

You hit all the right chords. The desire he feels for her is very arousing and his expression of it is deliciously well wrought. I'm always happy to find a great story unencumbered by poor spelling or grammar here. Hope you will share more with us in the future.

While I'm not normally a fan of the first person POV, I think you handled it very well. I loved the alliteration as well as your word play. Good, literate sentence structure, not to mention erotic as hell.

Very well done. I hope you write more :)

Nice - suggest shortening your paragraphs for easier reading ... keep writing

I liked the clever way this Writer manages his different scenes and the intimacy of a well written tale told in the first person. A wonderful first effort!

This is truly very good. The imagery is perfect, I felt transported there. Also, I thought the romance and tenderness came through really well, excellent!

Great visuals. As for advice, replace "boob" with breast, i think it would be nicer. Overall, great strory.

It's a well put together story - I didn't find the paragraphs too long, and it's nice to avoid the distraction of poor spelling. It's also hot! Stories about men wanting to pleasure women so unselfishly are fairly rare around here. Keep writing!

PERFECT! made me want to sit on my mans face

What a great story! You told it well, and made me wish that my boyfriend didn't have to work today... :) Wonderful imagery and Thank You so much for the correct grammar and spelling.

Cheers!

V

I really enjoyed the descriptions.

As a woman, this totally turned me on. Loved this!!

This was sexy and beautiful.