All Comments on 'Thunder'

There's a saying in China, I don't know if I'm right but it says "you can always take your revenge after ten years" well he got it on 5

I am not sure if I love the story or not. It is totally different and yet............I think a follow up story with some back ground, then he gets paroled so he can carry on his rain of terror err I mean justice, an eye for an eye, old testament you know. Thanks for posting.

Lol...good story. 5 stars. Thanx!

Loklie

What is a center linebacker? Did you mean middle linebacker?

what a creepy author!

When he parked the car in his garage i was wondering where this was going. Hope her new husband got in trouble with irs and work.

that was just ridiculous. Sorry I wasted the time.

Eh, whats the point of setting fire to her life if we cant enjoy it?

wasnt worth the time it took to read it............just stupid ramblings

now that you have an idea for a story, You can write the story...

It was different.

I felt it was a disjointed rant of a half-crazed man.

But who can understand the POV ramblings of a man half-crazed over

by hate and revenge.

Absolutely stupid.

Hilarious !!

Sensational twist! Outstanding...4*

I would have made a mean center linebacker with my build.

Middle linebacker.

Grammar and story were awful. Attempted murder, 2 counts is a lot more than 5 years. How low do you think a news helicopter flies? Not low enough people on ground feel any rotor wash.

just fucking awful.

Very interesting. Next time, he shouldn't make it so easy to get caught. I like this character. A prologue would be good. It sounds like he has kids, how is his relationship with them? What else did he lose other than his wife to the asshole? Then let us know, what happened to the (married) cheaters. Did the guy get in trouble for dirty business practices? Did her family and friends even care about the pictures since she married the asshole? Run with it.

Kind of OTT.

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"then the third, in the room, to knock it out." - If there was an extinguisher in the room, why didn't the lovers use it?

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He's not concerned about stealing the car?

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"why I would out myself as a cuckold" - There's no shame in being a cuckold, only in accepting it and/or not doing something about it. The shame is on those doing the cuckolding.

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Interesting twist. Wonder what he'll do next.

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If it's been five years, why are his folks interested in finding her, or is that just him projecting?

Maybe more details on the back story? Otherwise seems like a nice btb story

I really liked it. You did cut it short a little so please - carry on...

Really funny!

this story needs second chapter please

Bravo for originality. I like the writing style as well.

The main character is still nuts 5 years AFTER they divorce and wants to mess with her? Just a crazy asshole. I know that is what you intended but it was more rambling than story. Did she cheat? Not in this story. She simply got remarried, but the man committed what could be called attempted murder and then compounded it by felony theft. Not getting BTB revenge just a psycho stalker.,

Drivel

Just no……

2** …. But only because of Derk 😎

Excellent twist. Loved it. Some people have commented negatively...ignore. haters love to hate. TC ireland.

What a small cuckold loser

The logical extension of the BTB approach. Lovely work. :)

I won't say the story is for everyone but you have to admit it should be a huge hit for all of the mostly anonymous people who want retribution for every slight. Many times I commented "if you don't like the story, write your own" - I guess one did!

somewhere east of Omaha

Great little story. Funny as Hell. Nice twist when he first met with his lawyer.

Still laughing.

5'8 can only be a middle linebacker in High School. And a small school at that .

So why didn't his Lawyer friend go for some insanity plea where instead of prison he is in some institution for some period of time? Nice friend.

Bob, I really enjoy most of your outrageous writing, but this one was a little far out even for me.

wasted time starting to read, but then stopped reading.

Tkes too long to get to the real story. Too over the top after that. A 2.

Funny stuff - 4*

I do NOT want to like this. I really don't. (Damn it's funny.)

Not very interesting.

Very creative. It was a good quick read.

WOW!

You do the crime, you do the time. But sometimes, it's all worth it in the end. OH YEAH!!!

Five Stars

It takes a very sick type of person to think this story belongs on an erotic story site. It belongs on a site of dedicated numbnuts who can’t get a woman to save their lives so they write and read stories about fucking women over. Not one of them have a tenth of the balls the characters they read about do. Pathetic little weasels.

While this wont go down in the annals of some of LW best, it was rather funny.

At first I thought "This should be good"

Then I thought JFC this is over the top

and then I hit "OMG that was fun"

I'VE NEVEER DONE THIS BEFORE IN MY LIFE, BUT...

MIDWAY THROUGH I WENT BACK AND COUNTED AND THIS AUTHOR USED THE WIRD "I" OR "I'M" OR "I'VE"...WAIT FOR IT: 146 TIMES! (I COULD BE A LITTLE OFF AS, HONEST TO GOD, I GOT A LITTLE CROSS-EYED HALFWAY THROUGH COUNTING. BUT JESUS, RATHER NARCISSISTIC, DON'T YOU THINK? "I" REALLY WASN'T THAT INTERESTED IN "HIM".

Now there's a twist I didn't see coming. Good one.

Wrong category. Should be in Non-Erotic, or something. Just because a story includes a husband and wife does not make it a Loving Wives story. You should have included the marriage and divorce, then maybe had this as an epilogue?

Anyway, thanks for the effort.

lol gotta love it

Ouch! That story left a mark!

One sick MF. Hopefully she’ll be notified if he is released. His former attorney was correct, Bob needs some intensive therapy! Funny in a train wreck kinda way, but sick nonetheless. Oh the mind of BW, looking forward to your next offering.

A vivid illustration of what goes on inside the mind of a BTB fanatic; narcissistic insanity.

A sad story written for sad little trolls by another sad little man.

Giving this a 4 because while it was enjoyable it felt like only a partial story. I assume that was the point, a snapshot in Bob's revenge that shows he's a bit messed up in the head (maybe more then a bit) without the excess baggage. Without the meat of the story it to me feels like it could go either way, yeah the guy was probably in the wrong with excessive cheating but was it the result of him being a spurned lover whose wife left him or because she screwed him over. Sounds like the guy she was with took everything from the MC but its hard to tell with the story from the point of view of someone even 5 years after his divorce is still crazy for revenge. Still not bad, I love a good revenge story but acknowledge its a pretty effed up fantasy, a story that illustrates that is enjoyable in its own way.

Loved it! I assume if there is financial malfeasance, that he cheated with her before her divorce, and that is what ran the MC off the rails to begin with. He only got any revenge five years later.

Some friend. He really should have pled to diminished capacity.

Like all good jails, it is not doing anything to fix him, just make a him a better criminal.

Awesome look into a psychosis. He is my kind of character!!!

Not much good.

For what did he get five years?.He never hurt them and only caused slight damage to property

A glimpse and not a complete story, but interesting.

I was happy to see that author faced reality of life that literal BTB will result in prison as well as other dire consequences.

Regarding commentary that the guy did not burn that much, the facts are that arson is a terrible crime and, once started, often cannot be controlled. And it was an assault on the victims inside the bedroom, and so the 5 years is justified.

Loved the wedding night intervention. Hopefully there was something incriminating on the new husband's computer.

Yeah

Sometimes it's good to be crazy. I love it, he fucked up their wedding night. HA

Funny And Fun!

This is hilarious...hard to stop laughing...from the scoring I see we have many humor impair readers. Probably disappointed that it wasn't the usual formulaic cuck or btb story

Fuckin' awesome! Hell Yah! You be you dude. Made my night.

Much hilarity ensues. 5 stars!

Hilarious story! Where do you find your inspiration for this kind of comedic genius?

5stars funny¡

Great emphasis on the character and his delusional refusal to focus on what he can control

This guy was sad. He was not worth reading about.

Can't say it didn't have its moments...but they were few and far between.

a person cheats, you leave!!! that is it!! no X-mass calls, no 2 am calls, no contact ever again...

I was in three relationships in my life and all three cheated, I never spoke to any of them again.

Why would you, I mean have a backbone WTF, have some self respect

Ok. The story started out pretty good. But it took a turn for the worse, when you brought out they were divorced for 5 years. I can understand an ex husband plotting revenge against her lover, but 5 years later, nope. Going to jail for something like this, made zero sense. Good beginning, but then it entered the twilight zone. 3 stars.

Busted a gut. Didn’t see it coming. Fun. Thanks.

Good...........I like it.