All Comments on 'Tina's New Beginning'

i liked the concept but thought the dialog was not realistic. Women just don't talk the way you portray.

Keep up the good work.

Jacqui

smthing i would cherish....simply wowsome

However a few continuity problems, e.g. in part one Tina's husband left after 4 years yet in this chapter you stated two, and in part one the strap-on i'm sure you stated was 12 inches and yet in part two claimed that Tina had never experienced a 12 incher before. Not as bad as a Starbuck's cup on a medieval banquet table in Game of Thrones but having read them back to back, did distract a little. The speed the relationship developed reminded me of Chapter 7 and 8 of Got too, as all happened very quickly. As the joke goes, Q. 'What does a Lesbian bring to a second date?' A. 'a removals van'. Yet despite that you sure can write erotic prose. Keep it up.