All Comments on 'Tip of the Spear Pt. 03'

Strange, I live in Texas, and have voted for county commissioners before. Texas has 255 counties, and they are not all governed the same.

This was a good chapter as it is bringing the story along at a good pace a really building the intrigue as to what the real motives behind the murder are. I am enjoying this story very much.

You have me on tenterhooks waiting for the next episode (jaybee186)

Sorry there saddletramp as an consultant working with local state and Federal entities for over 50 years in all parts of the great State of Texas, the use of the term county commissioners is valid. Yes the official organization name is county court of commissioners but the short version used is county commissioners.

Anyway another great build up episode in the Ryan Caldwell saga. Look forward to the next installment!

Shouldnt be this long. -1 for not kikking these fucks yet.

Good chapter!

5

I liked the first chapter, read the second until a certain revelation was made, scanned the third to see if there was anything worth it. Some warning that the storyline was episode #714 in the "Secret Woman's Organization" series would have been nice.

Great story, ST! Keep em coming.

Good story as usual.

It is your story take, what creative license you need. I like that you do post the additional information in the notes however. It is always good to learn new teed-bits about things.

I have been catching up on your other series. I like the way you tell the stories and tie them together with little links in each.

Keep them coming. It is quite entertaining.

An interesting story.

Another fun one!!! Looking forward to the next chapter!

ST

You do such a great job on your stories it almost kills me when you fuck up.

"Is he married?" Allison asked. Another picture popped up, this time of another blonde woman.

"Yes," the blonde said. "Her name is Beverly. She's a local girl. Most people refer to her as the 'egg lady.' She keeps chickens and sells the eggs they produce."

Later at the football field.

"Okay, have it your way," he said. "But if you ever change your mind, let me know." Ryan and Ginger said their goodbyes and waited for the crowd to thin out a bit before leaving. They both knew it would take at least an hour for them to get out of the parking lot as it was.

Then you went back to Beverly.

Lose one star for big mistake.

Well written but moving kind of slow on this one as far as plot progression. Still 5*

Very good work, brilliantly told as always. Thanks for the story!

Interesting story. Nicely written. Personally, you're one of my favorite's writers here. Thanks for the story and please, keep writing... and finish this story.

1 star the writing was confusing and seemed rushed. Many typos and inconsistencies all the way through it like the one below. When did Ginger get out of prison? This is a sentence at Bertram's memorial, not up to your usual standard.

"Okay, have it your way," he said. "But if you ever change your mind, let me know." Ryan and Ginger said their goodbyes and waited for the crowd to thin out a bit before leaving.

5 stars and i love the comment at the end

So, Ginger instead of Beverly? Oops! Ok, Allison? Hmmmm..Is there a connection coming? Good story keep it coming.

I am enjoying this story as I have many of your others, thank you. I was surprised to see you mix up your characters though when you substituted Beverley for Ginger as they left the memorial

Please stop beating a dead horse and move on.

I don't know who said Texas has no county commissioners but that was incorrect. My county has four commissioner's and a county judge. They are the governing body of the county.

Love the story line, cant wait for more!

Mediocre poker. Try something new.

Awesome story line.... guess most readers don't read your 'disclaimer(s)' at the beginning....LOL.... your world, you make it like you want!!!

LOL!! When you have people arguing about county commissioners or not you must be doing everything else right with your story.

When I lived in Texas I voted for County commissioners... SO I know they have them. I also voted for the Sherriff and they were not appointed only the Police Chief..; but it is YOUR story

Always look forward to your stories. Don't care what's real or correct or even plausible. A great writer takes the reader on a journey. Especially like the journeys you have penned. Just wish they came out quicker. Thanks!! 5*

Enjoying the hell out of this series, the only problem with it is the new chapters don't come soon enough!

Enjoying the story. The one error I saw has already been mentioned. Typos are easy to make. You do a good job at creating these stories. Keep up the good writing and Thanks.

Sorry, but this one just doesn't hit me the way your other storieshave. I've foraken rating it in respect for liking so many of your othres. Perhaps it's just me but the flair seems tobe missing in the characters.

Who eve told you that Texas counties don't have county commissioners is FULL of it . I've lived in Texas as a 7th generation (one side of the family only ) redneck and am PROUD of it . All of the counties I have lived in over my 70 + yrs all have county comms. They run the crews and budget to keep our county roads and other county properties in good condition .

Waiting impatiently for next chapter.

one attorney can not ethically represent b3 co-defendants

Facing down a lynch mob, just like Wyatt Earp. Sheriff Caldwell is tres formidable. Great story ST.

Its ironic that one woman in the story pegged it perfectly when this came out of her mouth...."This isn't good," the other woman said.

Skipped round two of this because part 1 wasnt anything to write home about, thankfully I didnt get all the way through this one either.

As usual, a story second to none! I sent Literotica an email asking why and when they'd release your five stories and they haven't gotten back with my, probably never will. I hope they have a change of heart, soon! Best of wishes Mr. MarlboroMan! Oh yeah, 5 BIG FAT SHINY STARS!

You go right ahead and exercise all the artistic license you so desire.

This is a great story. Are you sure you aren’t a pro at this? Regardless, it is extremely well done. Thanks for writing!

Great story in the ST1956 tradition

A colorful and entertaining cast of heroes and villains. Can’t wait for them to converge. Should be a helluva climax. Maybe MARVEL will pick it up - ya think they’d be interested in an NC-17 division? I look forward to the next chapter. Thanks much!

story is not done, no opinion. LP

This is Saddle tramps world let him live in it ..That would be like the difference between an m-4 and AR=15 . true I prefer the heavier slugs of a 30-06 . That would be in My universe as I would get to pick and choose

Interesting material to keep the story moving along . . . Great job, Author!

I like the story but with such a large number of characters you need to ensure that you are pairing the actions with the right people, a bit distracting when you get it wrong.

Love the series. One goof here: “Ryan and Ginger said their goodbyes and waited for the crowd to thin out a bit before leaving.” Should have read ‘Ryan and Beverly’.

Still a good story regardless of many times I read it. LP

5 Stars on this one Saddle Tramp . I can understand people saying shit about a messed up line .. But ask them people how many good stories they have written on here ..

5 BIG ASS STARS!

I love it. 5 Big stars, and keep it coming. I love this one eyed character, as he's a mans man.