All Comments on 'Tits for Tats Ch. 02'

Really glad that you posted this second part of the story from a different point of view I thought that the two parts really tied together nicely and hope that you will continue the story.

nice story and it filled some holes from the first please continue

This is a very interesting story line and certainly different from your average brother sister tale. I'm looking forward to seeing the next installment.

The other idiot didn't pay attention to the fact that you wrote both. Very well done, love the difference, maybe in the next you could do a bounce back and forth between both of them

really love the story , hope you keep it going :)

Yaaay! You continued it, and from her point of view. ^.^ Very awesome! I enjoyed this telling as much as the one from Kevin's view. Still some grammatical errors, but not too bad. I really cannot wait for the next installment MSTarot.

Other than a few grammatical errors this was a very good story. I'd be more than happy to edit your next story for you, if you so need it. Thanks for the post, keep the stories up, they're great.

You change tense so often it's very hard to follow. Good story, but you need to stay in past tense or present. Can't do both...

please keep writing

Such a great story so far. This is by far one of the better stories in this section of Literotica. Keep up the great work and continue with another chapter please!

content and plot: A+

spelling and grammar: B-

this is a great story, lots of hidden material yet to rise to the surface... a good edit and spell check will make it even better.

I wont bother explaining. I just gave up after not even making it through half of the first page.

Pillar (pillar)

Bartending School (bartending school) (2)

Plan (plan)

baby sitting (babysitting)

Birthday (birthday)

State (state)

shoulder to the side (shouldered)

chanced the way (changed)

bar tending (bartending)

child like (childlike) (2)

out (of) my sight

"Threw?" "Yea. They way your (you’re) (5) using it. '9th through 11th grade' it's spelled 'through'." (I CAN’T DECIDE WHETHER THIS STATEMENT IS IRONIC OR HYPOCRITICAL SINCE THIS AUTHOR MADE THE SAME MISTAKE 11 TIMES IN CH 1)

else where (elsewhere)

tendon's (tendons)

life like (lifelike)

god (God) (11)

it's him (he)

That's it's (That)

to quickly (too)

half hearted (half-hearted)

g-string (G-string) (3)

when every (night) (-that is) (it) varies (AWKWARDLY EXPRESSED!!!!)

large D cup (IS THERE SUCH A THING AS A SMALL D CUP????)

mater Hun (matter hon) (3)

get changes (changed)

old fashion (fashioned)

Neon (neon)

bodies of the stripper (strippers)

laying on my side (lying)

Machine (machine)

Hurts (hurts)

Stops (stops)

A vice (a)

hit's me (hits)

with out (without)

round about (roundabout)

Sis (sis) (4)

he hold me (holds)

He cum (came)

its Kevin (it’s) (2)

every thing (everything)

Fuck you Fairy (fuck)

child like (childlike)

knell down (kneel)

what ever (whatever)

to bad (too)

over powering (overpowering)

some times (sometimes)

In minuets (minutes)

large breast (breasts) (3)

apartment is quite (quiet)

Mom (mom)

Mother (mother)

few give away (giveaways)

tart and sweat (sweet)

tip pinto (into)

his lip's (lips)

Tattoo (tattoo)

rose pedals (petals)

me hole (my)

lovers cock (lover’s)

no one gives a shit about your English grading of a story but you. Jesus man get a fucking life. 5 for all the errors

This was a most interesting chapter. I believe it captured well the life long psychic pain that victims of child abuse often feel. Sara is exquisitely conflicted over sex, especially with men. Add to this Kevin's lack of experience (read sexual immaturity) and the mix could go most anywhere. I think at this point Sara feels more like Kevin's mother than his sister.

loved it....