by DocWords
As I said before, this story grows on you. A bit over the top, sure, but I keep giving 5s. Hopefully those desperate for his 'treatments' will bow to his wishes. Keep it up.
Wham!!!! Blind sided. I figured the story would be done in one or two more pages. You have a possible dragon by the tail here. How deep will this go? Is it just a family thing, or something much larger? How about magic or a curse? So much potential...! You have reinvigorated my interest in the story. Keep it up and thanks.
A 5 star until the last few sentences.
Didn’t fit in with the story at all. Just tacked on the end.
Knowing when to quit is something many authors haven’t learned, even though most quit too early.
Sounds like Tommy's about to become very popular with his relatives (female of course). Another well thought out and written chapter. I look forward to reading the next. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.