All Comments on 'Tops and Bottoms'

This was a good first story, and I hope it's not your only one. I've struggled with that same mindset you mentioned in the preface, but it wasn't bad, by any stretch. The sex was hot, and you established some background, just try to slow down certain parts.

Naomi has the best ass in the company and I love seeing it get fucked. I felt the voice you gave Asuka here didn't quite match up with her, but that's ok. I see Asuka as a menacing uber-dom, so her actions in the story felt right. Good stuff and I hope you do write more.

you a good writer for a rookie, hope you keep putting stuff out man