All Comments on 'Touch It, Emily'

RE: "Then his strong fingers nestled into her cleft. At first his hand, squeezing and massaging her, was an alien invader. He was tickling, corrupting and defiling her. After a few more strokes and squeezes, he was a man, and she a woman. A little while later, she was his woman."

I love this...you just captured the purest essence of a ravishment beautifully.

mmmmmmmmmm...I sooo wanted to be that girl!

and very real story. Thank you.

That's a great story. The writing is terrific; the pace if good. I read it out loud to my wife and we loved it. Hope to see more from you.

great story, well written

shame all men don't take so much care to ensure a womans first time is as pleasurable as this

Definitely enjoyed reading this! The characters were perfect and the story's tempo was right-on!

Not only are your characters and plot fantastically crafted, but your evident love of language makes this story an absolute scorcher. Faultlessly, flawlessly horny...well done.

this story was rhe best i've read in a long time,keep it up

more please!!! the best i've read so far. naybe a new one will come with some ties and rope, eh?

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Great writing style.... As a mature man I felt very envious of Nick, and his gorgeous virgin, deciding to become a woman! Nick

Loved this story. One of the best I have read on this site. Great.

"...those hairy, curiously sensitive nethers...."

"...an explosion of emotion in fluid."

Nicely turned.

Oh well written , loved the pace and plot, described well,

That was a really beautiful story.

Your writing is a compelling demonstration of the superiority of words (over videos) for portraying sexual scenes. You take us so sensitively and poetically into the inner worlds of these two very believable people and a very believable situation.

This is my favorite of your stories. They're all amazingly well written, but I relate to this situation the best. I almost wish I was bi so I could relate to your gay stories as well the straight ones.

I see it's been quite awhile since you've posted anything new. I do hope you continue.

Very hot, thanks so much. Well written.

Lovely tale, poetic overtones.

"primitive glandular roughhousing"

Perfect!

Fucking-A!

I'm a chick who was prowling for a good "he's too big" piece and this fucking delivered!

i never write on here at all, but i must say you are actually a good writer. Erotica or no. Most back stories are kind of boring - the characters, narratives and dialogues empty, most sex scenes seem rushed or too cliche. You actually made this seem real. You took time to carefully build the scenes up, you didn't fall back on generic metaphors. You're a good writer. I even kind of liked the characters considering it's just a piece of erotica among many. Keep up the good work

See what happens when a curious co-ed discovers a limp cock and wonders what happens when she strokes it? Well, she was walking a little funny for a day or so, wasn't she?

Great story. Loved it!

Wonderful story about her first cock. Brought back some memories.

Good premise.

But sex, once it started, simply flew ahead.

Needed to be less automatic. Needed to be some reluctance that had to be overcome.

Needed him giving her directions/instructions about how best to give him a handjob and then the blowjob.

Needed extended playing with her pussy until she was the one who insisted that things move further.

Three stars.

Excellent! Just enough exposition to set the stage. While the plot appears to be inspired by fantasy, it stays within the realm of the possible -- and that realism makes the story all the more enjoyable. BTW, I work as a copy editor, and I caught no typos, punctuation errors, etc. on the first read. That may seem like a little thing, but it speaks to how careful the author is about detail. This is pay-for-it level writing. Perhaps you should find an agent.