by the_new_guy_234
Fantastic job with this. It was well-written, built-up very well... you gave the reader a chance to meet the woman and, therefore, feel the eagerness of the narrator as she began to seduce him. It was an added thrill that very few authors take the time to do, so it was much appreciated.
I'm just wondering what happened the next day! :D
I like the way you told this story. It was sexy, innocent enough that it could just happen to anyone...given the chance and timing. *Smiles* As everyone else has said, I'd be interested in hearing what happens. Great writing!
Such a good story, you managed to make the build up slow and seductive without running the story on to become one of those ten page epics which lose their flow as they get longer, will definitely be keeping an eye out for any more of your submissions
Keep it up
I've been reading your stories all morning - the perfect entertainment for a duvet day! It's a shame you stopped writing here a long time ago now, as I have loved each and every one that I have read so far.
I guess after so long it's unlikely that this will be continued any further. That's a real shame, it would be good to know what happened the next day. What would happen in her hotel room later in the day? Maybe she could have made him her fulltime foot slave!
Even with just one chapter - it's really good and I really enjoyed it.