All Comments on 'Travelling with Sheila'

Hi, I really enjoyed your story, it drifted along in a very pleasing way. In places I wonder if you may have used too many words as in this sentence,

'As great as Sheila looked in jeans, when she wore the skirts and satin blouses when we travelled...'

But I still enjoyed your story and will have a read some of your other submissions.

Pete