All Comments on 'Treasure Ch. 41-45'

Love the story and already impatiently waiting for the next post. Thanks for sharing your imagination and hard work with us.

And Merry Christmas! What nice present thank you partwolf:)

the bleach remark may cause you some issues

Great installment on this story. I noticed some misspellings and wrong word usage, but overall it was well done. I wouldn't worry about the "bleach" part...so many other stories have used that phrase. Hope you eventually decide to publish one day, your work is very good and I bet others would like to read it too.

Lots of perspective changes, missing information, skipped events, etc. You really need an editor.

Love, LOVE the "brain bleach" remark.

Friging great

Oral sex, Mom phone calls was beyond stupid. Other then that, good read

Looks like Chase's Mom's on the case.

Good story, but you accidentally write he instead of her or she, and vice verse, which makes the dialog very hard to follow at times.