All Comments on 'Trivial Pursuits Ch. 18'

Judicious use of water resources. I cannot help but think how disappointed Captain Planet would be in Denny and Alessa.

I was glad she swallowed. The story was well done, however way too many typo's. You need a Beta reader. ie. would should - I am glad you are going to condense it and speed up the pace a little. Still overall five stars! Doctime

I was so excited to see a new chapter today and you didn't disappoint. I fall more in love with them and can't wait for the next installment. Thank you for making their adventure so real. I am interested to find out what is causing so much of Alessa's guilt and the reaction of her family to this relationship.

looking forward to meeting the parents.

As with all good stories they reluctantly must come to an end. As to Alessa's family it is not unlike a family of a woman I know. When I met her she seemed to be an outsider in her own family. Although there wasn't a divorce to divide them it still hurt to think they could treat a daughter that way. After 45 yrs I am still her "security blanket"( A reference to Linus of Peanuts fame) and her husband. Denny is a more patient man than I am.

When are you gonna post the next part??

Chapter 19 is written, but it is off to my editor's. She hasn't yet emailed me to let me know when she will be able to get to it, so at this moment I'm as in the dark as all of you. Therefore, I wouldn't check back until Wednesday if not Thursday for an update.

Titania

So maybe it will show up by Friday? Saturday at the latest if it isn't delayed by something unforeseeable.

Titania

Rarely have I enjoyed a story this much on this site. Please, do not shorten the story nor the pleasurable time your readers have to truely relish it.

That the first 15 or so chapters are shorter than these sexual ones - you're the bees knees in my book.