All Comments on 'Troublemakers'

I have read all of your stories in about 2 hrs. andd i have to say that you are a brillient writer so continue writing pleas

great...... just comical.... it was awfully amusing..... u did it good by leaving the sexual details.... so, at last, i could at least keep my hands free.. u know, what i mean..... great work.... keep up....

darla has five letters

Mmmmmm thanks for the naughty entertainment. That very first nipple suck woke my puss up completely.

All men are boob men; some will say, "Not me; I'm an ass man." No, actually, some men like asses, some legs, etc., but all men like boobs. How appropriate they should be referred to as "troublemakers". Truer words were....etc.

Never had a sister like Darla although I dated someone in a former life like her. A casual, but very sexually intense, relationship --- I loved her boobs, and she loved men. The train had no chance of staying on the tracks. She was very picky, but if you were selected.... Thanks(?) for reminding me of a very sexual, but totally miserable short spiral into a hellish heaven.

The story was well told, but falling into bed with your brother/sister was way too easy.

"I'll tell Mom, if you don't!" That would have been funny as hell, as anyone that has been a kid brother has told on the older sibling(s).

Regardless, great story. Thank you.

it could have been better at the end in the bar it would have been interesting if after mark gave his speach as to why he should take darla home bill said go ahead and have her i really don't want her she's too big a tease for my tastes then turn and walk away

Still - most of your stories seem disjointed and unsatisfying. No, I don't need happy-ever-after and every detail spelled out for me, but, these seem more like story outlines than full stories. If you ever committed to a full story I'd love to read one. You have a skill. It's a great shame you never finished any of the stories I read here.

MPP

I think your first anon has a point but what i really like about your writing is that you aren't trying to use every common or gutter word as your story develops. Your people seem to have sensitivity and warm feelings.

When I brought up your profile and stories I started to dump for lower ratings. But I went ahead and opened a couple. So good! Then I read them all. One page stories generally get lower ratings thus the lower scores, but you are an extremely talented writer. So Thank You for a wonderful experience.

Johnny

And her with a set of double DD, what a way to go. And he did.... THANKS

Love all your stories some very similar to my own and some giving me fresh ideas! Thanks!