All Comments on 'Truth or Dare Ch. 01'

Excellent starting point! The pacing is just right and I look forward to the next chapter.

Cant wait for Chapter 2 , its getting me hot

Very well written story, thanks!

Aaaarrrrrrgggggghhhhhhh

More chapters are in line after this very good start. Well done..... the sensitivity was brought out really well. :-)

Chubby was as far as it got. I do like the lack of verbose descriptions of enormous male or female parts. I like the reasonability in her desires to shave and the tantalization conversion to something smoldering. Looking forward to the continuation.

Omg! So hot! Great story. I hope there is another one

I loved it, I can't wait until the next chapter

Apparently there are lots of words that don't mean what you think they mean. The several that you used in this were really jarring.

Wrong verb tenses were just as jarring.

Learn the rule for capitalizing titles as proper nouns, specifically for parents.

Brush up on when and how to use the more infrequent punctuations, em dashes, semicolons, and ellipses in particular, and learn how to punctuate the end or quoted dialogue.

Since storytelling is a very difficult thing to teach, or learn, it's good that is your biggest strength in your writing.

It's been a long time since I've said this anyone on this site: keep writing.

cute

Absolutely loved it! Can't wait for the next chapter! There was just the right amount of tension to keep increasing my excitement.

Need part 2!!!!!!!

The story made very good reading but there is one error that a lot of people make when referring to the female anatomy. The external part is the vulva that you are rubbing and if you want to play with the vagina, you will need to place your finger inside to do so.

finish it. but keep them exclusive

5 ... 5 ... 5

cageysea is way full of himself. And he's also full of crap.

Don't learn any rules. Just keep writing. Really.

Waiting for the 2nd chapter now

Very hot!

Nice storytelling. Do keep it up. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Love how this is being set up and where it's going. Looking forward to the next part.

Your cliffhanger is a bit of a letdown. Tune in six months from now for part two, maybe.

Great start, good story telling, keep it up I'd like to hear more. Minor thing, wondering and wandering are not interchangeable. I see it rather frequently these days, the comprehension of the english language seems to be dropping off. I'm sure any number of people on here would be willing to proof-read / act as editor for you.

Good slowburn, need 2nd chapter

All 3 stories are very well written and descriptive in all the right spots. Very erotic writing. I'm guessing you don't have a lot of time to write continuously, hence the lack of additional chapters. I'm not sure if it's a good thing or bad thing. All the stories leave me hanging, but in the right way.

Not even funny

I can’t disagree with cageysea that grammar is important, but that is why editors are important. It’s a sad truth that learning grammar is harder by studying than by hearing it as a child. I grew up with a mother who was a stickler, but not everyone has that background.

Please keep writing. You have the talent to go mainstream, if you wish, but even if it’s just here, keep going. To be honest, none of your errors jumped out at me. There are electronic helps, too, but not perfect. Even humans make mistakes.

Thanks for sharing your gift.

5*

Tc

More teasing, lol, but I'm sure it will get better.

Great start, an editor wouldn't be a bad idea.... I am thinking that "wondering" should have been "wandering" when speaking of the small town school.

Love it just the right level of friendly rivalry between them and dad playing interference .

Very good for the first chapter🤗! Sometimes it's hard to tell, but I have feeling this story is going to be fantastic!