All Comments on 'Twins' Summer of Discovery Ch. 01'

Being Irish myself, stuff like erotic spankings do happen in siblings, especially us twins. Keep up the good work!

Good plot/storyline. However, I'd work on the flow of the story - each sentence seemed seperated from the others. Also, if you added a longer introduction, with a less abrupt beginning, it'd be more intense.

that maybe good for some stories but on this story I was going for another style of writing. not introducing the people right of the bat but giving the readers info on the people in the story as it went along it just fit better for this story. If you havew read my other stories in titled Uncle's favorite niece I did just that there but here i felt that it would not work as well. And I do not understand what you mean on each sentence being seperated? if you could elaborate on that some? and that you for your comments. they are very much appreciated

I loved this story, babe! Very well written and HOT, though, of course, I am rather biased!

it could have been a good story if you had kept the spanking out of it if you need to put in that shit put your stories in the bdsm area so those of us that are not into it will not have to abandon a story midway through

replacing "come" with "cum" just does not cut it and distracts from the story

Sorry, just my opinion.

Butch

and the idiot who made the comment about spanking and putting this into BDSM is just that - an idiot! BUT - the dialogue seemed forced and not real. and i like to have a decent tease and character build before the sex - not much of that here. so......it was ok