All Comments on 'Two Captives Ch. 02'

I think you stories on Two Captives are Great being part Native America myself I love your stories.

I don't understand the comments on Chapter 1 at all. I'm a straight guy, and I can't stand blowjob descriptions. Makes me feel gay all over, reading about some other guy getting sucked. Pussy-licking, on the other hand, totally gets me off. I'm completely lost on how blow-job descriptions turn *women* off.

This story was great, I went ahead and read it twice! :) I liked it much better than the first one. It had a much broader side to it, the storyline is going along nicely, and I highly enjoyed it. Keep up the great work.

I read your first chapter and really didn't like it but you've pulled all the stops out with this second chapter and it made for hot reading - you listened to your critics and made a second chapter that was very different from the first - well done.

Mirriam - UK

I really liked this story. The first section was not exactly to my taste but really set up the background for the community that you are building. I like this installment and can not wait to read more about Sarah and Two Bears.

us more about the adventures of this girl and the indians. I can not wait.

you have great writing skills....you ought to get published!

Your research and attention to detail are definite assets to this story; well done!

It went from porn to a romance novel. If Fabio appears in chapter three, and starts tearing corsets... I might giggle just a little bit.

The story line and character development are great. I realize that I'm writing this after you're done with it probably, but for your future writing, I suggest a good editor. There are several misspellings and improper usages (not synonyms, but "sound-alike" words). Doesn't damage the story but does provide a distraction. Still, keep up the good work. Helps keep other things up!

not too much sex here but at least still no mention of anal as i stated on chapter 1 more fine detail on the blow jobs is a turn on but this time only one blowjob takes place so not much of a issue she has really just become a indian so its just now a story about indians not too exiting and him giving her oral dont do a thing for me