All Comments on 'Two Cousins in One Room Ch. 03'

BUT the blatantly excessive overuse of 'fuck' and 'fucking' as both adjective and adverb in the dialog is a HUGE detractor. By eliminating, completely, or at minimum, reducing the use of these words by 95 percent, the images of your character's would be greatly enhanced, as would the scoring of the story, undoubtedly. I am confident that I am not alone with this opinion. Could've gotten a Five, but not as presented. Sorry.

I have no idea how people are favoriting your story. Have you even read any of the comments on your other stories in the series? The writing is poor and it makes it very difficult to understand at times, and it is extremely unrealistic. Have you ever fucked somebody 4 times a day? For multiple days? I have and it hurts after a while. And I've know females who cum like that and they get really dehydrated and sore after 1 fuck session...never mind the multiple ones here. I agree with the other commentor, ease up on the use of the word fuck. For the love of god please get a proof reader and maybe your stories will be easier to read and maybe make sense.

Read all of the sections and liked the story with one exception, that was poor treatment of a parent the way you dispatched Mom. Could have been better handled than to make her the heavy. After all I think what a person believes about sexual contact among family is very personal. Otherwise nicely thought out.

And without a proper ending.

A great shame.

Rapier

I liked the story but I think it was the wrong one to read. The last comment was 3 years ago, so, you will probably never finish it.