All Comments on 'Two Grey Ladies'

The subject matter of your writing is fantastic. When you described the butt plug in the opening scene of your predicament, I imagined the proportions and blissfulness of being filled and stretched. Your detail throughout the story is very good and leaves this reader wanting more.

One slight criticism is that at points the sentences are a bit choppy and may be in need of nothing more than punctuation. All in all, a very good read. I gave you five stars.

The sentiments and fantasies are marvelous, the author has a creative and unexpected sense of submission. But I did find the language to be a bit odd and tortured. Some actual grammatical mistakes, and lots of awkward sentences. This is very close to superb. Thank you!

What happened? Too well written to lweave us in mid-air. Let's have a followon chapter - please!