All Comments on 'Two's a Crowd Ch. 10'

Great technical writing doesn't mask dribble. I wanted to give the story a chance, since the plot seemed out of caracter for angiquesophie, but it meandered into the realm of the bizzare - - and lost me somewhere in space. No more. I appreciate the effort but maybe you'd be better served as someone else's editor.

I imagine we'll find out the mystery once another one, two, maybe three chapters come our way. As the cliche goes, Osborne is treating Bruce like a mushroom (he keeps him in the dark and feeds him shit). Erica is sexually assaulted but now loves Myriam? Enthwistle drops all charges? How can Bruce be charged when he was assaulted first, then tied up against his will, and only used violence as a means to escape his captors? He took Enthwistle as a hostage to prevent the bodyguards from doing anything to him, to buy time. No grand jury would ever charge him no matter how "VIP" someone might be. This has become a kind of fairy tale and I guess Erica will turn out to be Osborne's daughter, Enthwistle's long-lost daughter, or some other person who has the power and influence to straighten everything out. Bruce goes through mood swings that would make a woman's hissy fits look tame -- as with many of the male lead characters in this author's stories, he acts mainly as a woman might act (the kidnapping of Enthwistle was just a smokescreen to pretend Bruce has testicles). I'm still baffled as-to where it's going; I guess a lot of readers now are sticking with this until it (hopefully) gets explained to the reader's satisfaction.

See, even the names are getting as confusing as the story.

As far as I'm concern this novel is finished, I'll read no more, it's far to ridiculous now. Kill the bitch off or him, I don't much care, end of story, you're just rambling on.

How about this, Erica and Myr are sisters, same father different mothers, that's why Myr, cryptically says she loves Erica as well as our hapless narrator. The question of the mysterious emailed from the beginning that sen him pics and info on her hooking, could that have been Erica? Then she sets out to meet him in New York and befriend him, why? He had no charm, no personality and was someone who you had to try to befriend, seems like she tried to hard, for what purpose? Things have gotten too convoluted for me. This has to resolve soon, I'm close to dropping this story. Shame really.

What started as a good mystery with good drama and emotions has devolved into something very frustrating. Myr's character development just has not changed. From day one, she could never tell us anything, we found out from others, then the split personality story, and now she's back to the same deflection of questions that she started with. This isn't love. And his love? That isn't love either, just a man trying to find the answers to an unsolvable problem the way it's been written.

Author, you are amazing. The intricate twists to this tale are keeping me eagerly awaiting each new episode. True there is a lot for anyone to believe reality, but that in itself is the beauty of the tale, and that is what it is, a tale, a story. It is woven by a creative mind that I, for one, hope continues to amaze us with her wile. Keep it up author, you are great!

Nothing is what it appears and as usual Bruce does

not let Myr answer his questions before running off.

He really has take some training on sitting and listening!

I continue with the feeling that this is a parody of what Sophie usually writes...

was it a set up by erica and myr. please go on with the story its getting good.

Is Bruce beginning to lose himself, and becoming someone else. Is his mind playing tricks on him, was their ever a Myriam,will he wake up and find himself in a padded cell. The only thing he can really trust is gravity, if he throws something in the air and it just floats then he will know he is in a fantasy world.Where the hell is a rabbit hole when you need one........Rich

He lets everyone else control and direct his life without even considering none of it could happen without his permission by omission. M is still a certifiable nut and should not have been rescued she really didnt want to be, she is as he said a common whore. Erica is by now his enemy not his friend. I mistakenly thought she was in love with him but it turns out he attracts women with mental problems, hers is she finds a slut to fuck. His employer is neck deep in the shit and our dumb hero still is standing there taking this shit. Time to close the book, leave the city, move somewhere like Dallas and start over. Had he any balls, and the writer has castrated him, or character he would walk away without ever speaking to or having anything to do again with any of these poor demented souls. Lets just understand one thing. The person M had the shower after was Onslow he had just finished fucking M and Erica in the room. Whores have to pay their debts in sex you know. Your black hole of this story still doesnt make any sense. Someone said you wind it around I say you are lost and looking for an ending.ef9

How readers like digdaddyrich bruce22 exjock think this is a GOOD story.

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If you go back and look at this authors other male bashing stories you will find that SUDDENLY in the last 2 chapters the Gay like dumb fuck husband suddnely becomes James Biond or Magmun PI. We see this happening again with this story

The number 1 underlying constant in this awful wretched jumbled turd of a story has been that now matter what... <b>no matter who Myriam fucks... no matter what LIE she tells... no matter how massive the deceit... no matter Myriam ever does say or think or act.... Bruce cannot even think a negative thought about her much less SAY a single negative word.</b>

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Now suddenly he throws her out.

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That anonymous poster who said that this author always has her male/husband suddenly become James Bnd or Robert B Parker's Spenser or Jesse Stone Charactersis 100% correct.

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I have noticed this as well... In this author's other long writings such as <u>THE YOUTH TRAP</u>...<u>A NEW AND DELICATE BALANCE</u>... <u>A TALE OF IMMORALITY </u>

...and <u>LOVE IS A SILK TURD </u>. And in everyone of her stories the husband suddenly and totally out of character gets a set of brains and balls RIGHT before the ending.

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After all Bruce has been through with the whore wife WHY would he NOW get upset at Myriam falling in love and fucking Erica?

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<b>why would Bruce after risking his LIFE his career his sanity wasting ALLLLLLLLLLLLLL this time NOW suddenly figure out that Myriam does not Love him? </b>

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Doesnt this go against the entire story?

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Bruce did NOT toss her Myriam ass out when he caught her whoring around in chpater 1.

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Bruce did not get angry and demand to know the TRUTH in chapter 2 and 3.

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Bruce after seeing her 1 time in Dallas after 2 years decides to save her.

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Bruce after learning his entire mariage to Myriam was one big LIE Bruce sets up an elaborate scheme to force Myriam to confront Estelle.

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so WHY now? Its a simple question really... <b> WHY does Bruce NOW decide to Toss Myriam out after going through all this effort to save her... simply because she is lying again?</b>.

that Myriam and Erica have known each other for years?

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that Erica and Myriam are deeply connected to the business deal that this dumb fuk Bruce has been "working on" that involves these two older rich white guys?

But if anyone would like to go to a different website the complete story is there. And trust me it does not end happily for bruce. Harry bless him is right. Here's a hint DONT TRUST ERICA.

so in your need to live up to your reputation

as a prophet you went to sol and came back

telling us what you saw in chapters 11 and 12,

presenting it as a by the way.

naughty boy (smile).

Even though You come up with another twist, it's the same over and over again. With multiple male partners or with female partners, it doesn't change a bit to what she is or was. She never was "his" and will never be. For a guy with an analytical mind, it takes him very long to accept that he was and is looking for an illusion. G.Belgium.

the people were confusing, estelle real or a foil for myr?

throw in erica and the rich guys and his boss? if she was 2 persons, and a relationaship w erica, when he had one ? to be rid of the lot seems to be the better deal from out protagonist.

Only two constants in this story, Angiquesophie's excellant writing and Bruces naive stupidity. Hope he matures by the end of your story.

the Ct. Yankee

I give you a high grade because the writing is good. but, the theme while complex is leading to the same ending. The guy takes gas and everyone else gets what they want and need. I have not gone to see the other parts, don't think I will. It will be interesting to see if my suspicions are confirmed.

You do make the guys out to be idiots with little or no backbone. They are just jetsom in the lives of others.

I keep waiting for you to write a story where characters are not at just the mercies of their lack of character or lack of intelligence and backbone. I suspect with your talent such a story would be magnificent.

at the other stories site...

This is like that first season of Law + Order: SVU, where every guy on it was a disgusting pervert or a complete doormat to the female characters, who, even when they are evil, have some sort of male-induced tragedy as a ready-made excuse "my dad molested me and my fiancee blackmailed me and my mom."

When you get around to writing a story with real male and female characters, and not plastic stereotypes, let us know.

I'm out of here. I'm not going to read until 2015 to never see the light at the end of the tunnel. and all just for some mean scheming women making fun of one guy for years. in this story there is no decent character. if you all like that and would like to be part of it, well then you have to read till the end.

the only thing i hate is not being able to turn the page. i just hope you have the talent and the imagination thats need to pull off the rest of the story

You copped out and brought no closure to the story. You were never able to pull it out of the black hole. You made both women the worst types of prostitutes and whores lying and deceiving all the way for you clients and not the man who loved M nor the friend of E. When he got mad and E said dont try it, he should have simply killed them both and walked away. The world would be a better place and he would have regained his sense of self worth after having been played by two pieces of trash for years. To say he finally found a better woman simply isnt a good ending. Its terrible when a writer writes themself into a corner and cant find a way to work their way out. The weakest plot of all was having an evil M telephoning him to bring him back to her so she could twist the knife further into him or purpose. all told all twelve chapters are a real waste of time.

There's nothing of what we might call "redeeming" quality about the plot or characterization in this silliness, from beginning to end. Writing's decent enough, however.

Would call prostitutes "amazing" and mean it, the dolts! LOL <p>

"Who was that woman?" she asked. <p>

I looked around. The goddess had gone — like a mirage. My eyes wandered through the shop. I did not see her. <p>

"Ah," I said. "Someone I thought I knew once." <p>

"She looked ... amazing." <p>

"Yes," I said. "Amazing. <p>

Myr is tainted material and you should stay away from her. The first time you met was accidental, the secondtime you got back together was a mistake, the third time was a tradegy lesbian affair and don't let the forth time be your demise. You are in the clear and have nothing to worry about, so relax. Visit a nice lady and have her take care of your worries. Then go home and forget about her and you will wake up with a clear conscious and stop carrying a torch for Myrian because it does nothing but draw moths.

. . . all business sense, no people skills whatsoever, but more importantly no desire to learn. Even Einstein came to understand that insanity is doing the same thing and expecting different results.

Two chapters to go to see how angiquesophie ends this mess.

Still one of my favorite authors.

After having the guy waffle for the millionth time, it becomes apparent that there is no possibility that the same guy is some future member of any board of directors. He has the executive decision making abilities of a stoner deciding what kind of ice cream to get at 101 Flavors.

Thanks for sharing.

Getting to FTDS time

I kept reading this story hoping it would improve. I hate TV soap operas and end up reading a Lit soap opera.

The principal female characters are interesting while Bruce is a spineless blathering whimp with some real issues. Not at all a likable character.

Totally unlikable and there's no rationale that's been presented to explain Myriam's love of him.

Quite the sad thing.

Ok i gave this story alot of leeway..but all these turns...none of em very good and all of them rather nonsensical

just weird but I have to keep reading so you've done a good job

A constant seesaw of uninteresting shiftings. What is this schmuck character doing any of this for?