All Comments on 'Ultimate Nightmare'

I liked that the good guys won and that they were rewarded (or at least not punished) for doing the right thing and making hard choices. Ive always wondered about people who say they are your friends and in the same breath say that they couldnt tell you that your spouse was cheating (or any other unpleasant news) because they didnt think it was their place. Seems to me that its just cowardice on their part and it makes you wonder how good a friend they really are. The guys in these stories made the tough decisions and came out better off after some initial hurt. Nice to see that.<p><p>

Even though I liked the outcome and moral of the story, it was a bit flat imo. I think its because there was no back story or buildup. There was no real sense of loss or upheaval for either of the men in the story because we didnt know anything about their relationships. There was also no sense of loss or remorse for either of their ex's since you didnt tell us what became of them. Given their behavior, its easy to imagine that they both went back to their lovers right after the initial confrontation and didnt give two shits for what they lost or the hurt they caused. I know their status shouldnt have anything to do with whether the guys are happy, but the lack of follow through is another missed opportunity for emotion to be shown imo.<p><p>

All in all, it was a pretty good story though. Thanks very much for writing.

i even like the Addie character. she seemed believable.

anyway, who's next? i've read Techsan's. now wrotingdragon's, who's next?

your style is different,but your stories are on time.good job and write more stories.

I liked the story and even better it was well written. It had a very nice twist and the ending was rewarding. Keep writing and I will look for your work.

Woulda been nice to hear about Addie and Constance...but that's what imagination's are for.

one thing that i could see. it definitely needs another writingdragon story right behind it. and please don't say soon, because that's not soon enough. as i impatiently wait for your next one, i remain your fan always. wetapap

It's obvious that you put a lot of effort into this story and the results show. The writing was definitely a notch above the norm but to me it seemed very workman-like. I wish I could put my finger on it, but something just didn't click that would have made the writing something special.<br><br>Some things in the story line were very cliched, especially Addie's confessing that she had gone to the spa only to break off the affair. What a coincidence that Jason became aware of the affair just when she was breaking it off!<br><br>They say it's a small world, but Marc turning up as the fiancee of Jason's fiancee's mother made me want to demand back the half hour I had already invested in reading this story. What was the point of that plot twist? Ludicrous, if you ask me.<br><br>All in all this was a good story with above average writing. I will definitely look for this author's work in the future.

Very good. The only downside is there should be a second part - maybe Marc's ending with Constance and taking up with Tegen. I've always liked your stories and just want more. Thanks for the words and your time in writing them.

Finally a story with a different recipe. Good writing too.

It would be nice to see what happened to the two cheating women.

Very well done.

on with his life. It's a refreshing change from other stories where the protagonist wallows in shame and indecision for years and years. Life does move on eventually, even in the most painful circumstances.

Good story. Thank for your effort.

I had an email with the author and he explained some of the twists (as to how he created the story and its characters and how they came to be where they were but unfortunately do to editing and other consideration, he said he was not able to include everything) and IT MADE sense, it made pretty good sense. <p>

I am usually pretty critical about characterization and happenstances, but after hearing from the author himself, I agreed with him that the whole thing did work out very well. The only thing I said to him, like the autor WETAPAP and otehrs here said, was that WRITINGDRAGON crank out another story from this particular CREATION of his, because the heinous crimes committed by Constance and Addie were pretty, well, heinous. <p>

But I also noted to the author that while the mother, Canstance, had had some 20 plus years to perfect her deceitful character, ADDIE, the daughter, was still quite young... and from the haunting cries of finality that Jason detected in her, as he left her place for the last time, Addie realized, in her young life, how you could truly sever yourself from someone you truly love, if you engage in activities that even you yourself know are both idiotic and having no future (in addition to, of course, losing a true future you could have built with someone you ought to never have betrayed)... <p>

Unfortunately, WRITINGDRAGON said there would be no sequel. <p>

But.... authors, all authors, need to realize what movie makers do know: once you've establish a "franchize" name of some type, you draw more crowds, almost automatically. While you don't want to bore your followers/audiences with endless sequels, one or two can be done with very memorable or good stories/movies/ideas....

One of the best I've read. Thanks.

This is the third story dealing with a couple of couples with cheating spouses that I’ve read. Just Plain Bob gave us “Rob’s Wedding” in November of 2005. That was a well-written and delightful little story. Then Techsan gave us “Two for One” yesterday, and that had little drama and was somewhat flat, and now we have the entry by Writingdragon.

This story failed to provide any drama, emotion or suspense. Was this supposed to be a tale where coincidence and irony grab the reader? I hope not. This was a dud.

First off I want to say these are only my opinions, I'm not trying to tell the author how the story should have been written. I liked the story a lot, but when I finished reading I couldn't help but feel something was missing. That something was the consequences that Constance and Addie should have faced. My own past experience tells me that if Addie truly loved him she would have tried a lot harder to get Jason to try and work things out. On the other hand her exclamation to continue her infidelity after she was married, as stated in the transcript Marc gave to Jason, would have led to another conclusion to their particular story. And then there's Constance's disdain for her husband that was evidenced in the transcript obtained by Jason. I think the road that led from Marc suggesting counseling to his apparent divorce and relationship Caryn's mother might have been worth a few paragraphs. A little bit more of the aftermath from both couples might have added a little something to the story. Like I said, just my opinion. I'd prefer to give something more than a 75, but it wasn't a 100.

I think it is rather cliche to have the cheating wife or in this case the wife to be claim that she drove up to the spa to break it off... does anyone REALLY believe that? why would she HAVE to go up there to break it off?

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SECOND why is ADDIE upset that she lost Jason?

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Typically the engagement period is time when a couple are the MOST in love and have the hots for each other...

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surely when she was fucking Jason and secretly planning to cheat on him during and after the Honeymoon.... it surely Must of occurred to Addie... hmmm maybe I dont love Jason that much or at all. If I am fucking around with Bart during the engagement period....

ability. Throughly enjoyed the story, especially the part where each informs the other the woman in their life has betrayed them. Were I the father and the wife had been with my business enemy any thought of counseling would be buried and she would be out on her ass that day. Let the lawyers work out what she can have after the divorce. The daughter unfortunately inherited her mothers genes, ah a gene for creating sults and adulterers. Our young hero made some very good decisions and the best was that she had destroyed the relationship they had beyond repair. He had asked his exfinace not to contact him but her not answering his call or email spoke wonders for where she was then, in Bart's bed. She wasted very little time getting over her anguish for breaking up their marriage, speaks again to how little respect and love she had for her former fiance. A bit to much irony in having the new finance's mother engaged to his ex's father. But then again genes do show.

Great writing and a great story. I wish you had explained a bit about what happened to constance after the divorce, and what happened to Addie.

Your talent, imagination and time spent for us is greatly appreciated.<P>

Due to the gravity of their personality flaws no follow-up with the girls would be credible or worth anyone's time.<P>

Again Thanks Author - Very nice and credible work in the emotional arena of marital consequences.<P>

With Very High Regard

I would have preferred the author to stick to the one story he began with. The double take when each of the men realises that the other is talking about his partner must have been hard to resist after he thought of it but I would have enjoyed a story which didn't take that twist more. The situation he had set up was original so far as I know but it got lost in the much more conventional one of a young woman discovering in a messy way that she isn't ready to marry her fiance. For me the last meeting between two men who know too much about each other was itself too much.

What happened to her

The two twists of fate make up one hell of a coincidence.. It's sad to think that two sentences would be what would finalize their thinking about the wife and fiance.. Otherwise they MIGHT have worked things out.

The middle of the story when he found out his future wife was cheating on him took me by surprise but the ending was a real surprise. Thank you for writing.

...to the very end. I loved the twists and turns! I never expected the ending.

Let's hope this dragon keeps writing. It was quite an interesting story.

There may be some outcry about the two coincidences but, "What the hell!" it is fiction after all.

This story started slowly with the first one third bordering on boring. However, after that I could not stop reading until the excellent, explosive ending. Writingdragon is very good. He could however have made the story more complete (thisd applies to sdome other authors ass well) by providing the reader with perspective as to place and time for the story: by which I mean where the story happening, the season(s) of the year, the weather, the feeling of the climate affecting the main charters. Towards the end, Jason moved west...... where in the west? Anyway, great story! RAG

Well written story. A clever change from the standard plot line. Congratulations.

The Ct. Yankee

than on the surface? Constance was revealed as a lying cheating slut. Addie appears to be a lying cheating slut in training. You might consider writing this story again from Marc's viewpoint. Except as a stalling tactic I can not imagine Marc taking Constance back. She slept with the enemy, bragged how she controled him, belittled him and planned to dump him after the wedding. What can counseling do about this situation?>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Addie was the more interesting cheater. She starts up this affair with Bart two months prior and told Jason she fucked him 5 times. Yet, the PI report on her listed 4 times presumably over a 2 week period. She hung out with her girlfriends every week. Then we have the phone call to her on Friday night which she claims to hear on Sunday. If there was a fight on Friday night it was probably about Bart cooling it until she had smoothed things over with Jason. Given how close her girlfiends were to her do anyone think they would not have went up to the spa if they could not reach her? On one hand Addie is so guilt ridded that she had to call off her affair with Bart (the same night Jason revealed he knew about it) but she never responded to his parting e-mails or calls. Addie should have at least put the wedding on hold until she sorted out her feelings. Addie did not promise to never cheat again. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Both Constance and Addie had to have control of their spouses. When Addie realized that Jason was not going to accept her cheating ways she wrote him out of her life. No doubt Constance used the same "heat of passion" excuse that Addie used for her words about Marc. I loved the ending where otherwise successful spouses (or soon-to-be spouses) move on with their lives. Good riddance!

enjoyed your story, I found it very readable and it seems possible room for a part 2. Thank you for entertaing us. Mike from Texas

I figured out before the actual revelation that Marc and Jason were both going to learn their women were cheating on them. But it was nicely done. The ending strains credulity but was still an admirable touch. The story flowed smoothly and showed good writing skills. The dialog was appropriate given the specific circumstances. My only criticism is that Jason was overly dramatic. In fact, he reacted more like a woman would react when betrayed by a lover; he was virtually paralyzed by his emotions. Marc seemed more like a man, more in control. One would think Jason, rich at a young age (late 20's), would have the self-confidence and toughness to handle the emotions in a less wimpy way. Maybe I'm into stereotypes too much, but that's my opinion.

I loved it. The story captured and maintained my full attention throughout my reading. The writer made me feel like I knew the subjects of his story. I only wish he would write something else and soon. Glenn in North Carolina.

That surely had the perfect little twist at the end. I loved it, thank you so much for sharing this story, well done!!

froggman

Well written. Well crafted. Hooked me early and had me wanting to know more, while wanting not to know more. This was a great read. Thanks.

The time you devoted to this story DID PAY OFF!!! GREAT STORY

Well written and structured. As I have stated before, it would be fun to listen to our gallery of critics discussing Shakespeare's plays. I am sure that they would conclude that they were well written but unbelievable! Even Henry the Fifth

would have problems! Come to think of it Dickens' Child's History of England is probably even more unbelievable!

It used to be considered a real horror story before the film

makers got to work.

Well written. Realistic separation but I would like to see a Part 2.

You Sir have talent! Some of the best writing I've had the pleasure of reading, especially your detailed depictions of your characters' emotions. It truly made me feel like I was part of the story. Bravo

the women were discovered accidently and all their lives fell into shambles. the immediate uncomfortability of jason and marc talking at cross ends, then realizing....

both stood up for themselves, at least to dismay of addie. it worked out and just a restatement of the fact that strange but true things happen for the men, at least a happy ending, and bart and addie could play the country song backwards, where the truck is retuened, dog is found, etc

Thanks for the engaging and dramatic plot, twists and turns and the final landing in a most satisfying manner!

finally a man with intestinal fortitude and conviction.

This is the second time I've read this one and enjoyed it even more this time. Keep up the good work.

I would like to follow the players awhile longer to learn what happened to the ladies.

Yessss, everything they said and more. Very good story and a truly great read.

I would like to know the talk between Marc and Jason.

It was notches above the norm here. And I appreciated the writing style.

Thanks for a good read and interesting twist at the end.

I too would like to hear that conversation between Jason and Marc.

Thanks for writing!

Thank you a realistic tale of the real consequences for those self-centered sluts and jackass males who chose to cheat on their better halves.

Nice bit of storytelling here, keep it up

Rock on. drmike

Amazing blindside. I truly hope you write another one for us

Two surprise twists in one short story. Great job.

OK, not really...I did see the whole confrontation between Marc and Jason going the way it did, but not the meeting at the end. Nice little twist.

Although I would think that meeting his once and future father-in-law-to-be, it would dredge unwelcome memories and feelings and make it all very awkward. I think it would also make him curious to know what happened to Addie after their split - a story I'm kind of curious about, too!

This could well be the third time I'm reading this, the first read I could smell it coming, both were cucks now I just laughed in anticipation, yes it's a good story.

One recurring word irks me a little as I read it to often in the many Loving Wives stories "why?" as I wonder if many involved in this situation in real life actually wonder "why" he/she did it, for one thing he/she probably don't know why themselves and it does not matter really since the deed is done.

I'm not criticizing the author here, as a reader I am thankful for they are trying to entertain me even when I don't like the story.

This is an amazing story and as anon said two surprise twists, I've never read any others with as much in them as this story has. I am not a writer myself but my compliments to a fine writer. R.T.

And unlikely but plausible - too lol

Well done the confrontation with Marc went as expected the second meeting was a real twist -

I do have a morbid wish to know what happened to Constance and Addie though heh - Addie has the time to learn from her mistake and try again if her mom does not screw her up totlaly.

Marc would not give Jason the results of a PI investigation about Addie. That is not what fathers do. Instead he would have talked to Addie. Only if Addie refused to listen is there any chance that Marc would have informed Jason.

In any event Jason should have been willing to overlooked what Addie and accepted her apology and, at least, given her another chance. The fact is women are designed to cheat and provided it is not excessive, men need to accept that.

Great story. Comment by DWornock indicative of a shallow mind with no comprehension of reality. DWornock needs to stick with Dr. Suess books.

The story is a good one because almost all readers want to know more. You are or were indeed one of the best writers on this site.

I would like to suggest that another good writer give us a sequel since so many of us want to know more about what happened to Addie and Constance. Any takers? Please? HDK? Anybody? StangStar? Rehnquist?

As far as DWornack. You are awful young to know what people will do or won't do. You do not make negative comments per se, but you do come across as a know it all about what people will do or won't. It is a bit amusing that you always give a 1 star vote if the story is about people not as young as you, or "Old people" as you always comment. Do you realize that most of us do not really care about your dismissive type of comment? You are not always wrong but neither are you always right.

You are young enough (According to your Bio) to write yourself. I look forward to your future stories since you are so well informed.

I love happy endings. lol

Please excuse his inane mumblings. Perhaps, if he ever grows up, he will say something worth paying attention to. But probably not.

on marriage, vows, respect and committments. TK U MLJ LV NV

I'm not sure that would be what I would call the beginning of the story, but I hold true at the end. Well Written. Thank You.

i liked the ending - should have seen it. there is no such thing as counseling for what was done. and the transcripts were the best evidence. women are always so sorry when THEY get caught. that is why they are sorry, they got caught. gave you a 5 even though you dont appear to be around anymore.

What a great story very entertaining. I love the ending thanks for sharing.

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... it was a good story but it was unfinished. There should have been more about the sluts at the end. Some sort of retribution; perhaps the daughter in an abusive relationship with the second tier singing going nowhere boyfriend, then for the mother the discovery that her lover was just using her for information on her ex-husbands business. That would have given me the closure I needed for Jason and Marc. And as almost always with the LW category it could use more sex.

PS. In Jason’s talk with slut he should have brought up the “puppies” line. The worst part of her treatment of Jason was her agreement to allow the redneck to knock her up.

What a great story. The cheating wife and the cheating fiancee got screwed and the young man and the ex and now current future father in law found real true love. It's so happy I could cry.

Maybe not.

HA HA HA

Loved it. That was a fun read and I certainly liked the ending.

Glad that the ending was upbeat. Hard to believe that Addie cheated repetitively just before her wedding! Dan

Nice story with a good ending. I felt addie got away lightly and she could have been punished more. Overall, a nice read.

However,good read for teenagers. 3 stars.

Glad Jason didn't give in to a cheater, even though not written I'm sure Addie suffered...and that's a good thing, and an interesting twist bringing Marc back into Jason's life. I really liked the story!

Dual discoveries followed up by dual PI reports because Mom & Daughter find 'hot strange' at about the same time. Then they both plan to dump on respective hubbies after the wedding adds up to AT LEAST two coincidences. Then our Hero happens on Daughter's spa-buddies very far away from the spa. Lucky timing, lucky location! We're up to 'three' now! Throwing in Marc having hooked up with new Fiancée's mom is WAY over the top and unnecessary. Take 2+ more ... the extra for the gratuitous nature of this coincidence AND the MASSIVE geographic area in play for these two men to find those two women in the same general time frame!

good story. i really enjoy you stories. I can't help but think that something has happened to you. i pray that you are well, and will begin to write again. THANK YOU

As Very Special Agent Jethro Gibbs would say -

There are no coincidences - it is the hand of fate - or well the author lol-

Not bad - but one has to wonder about Constance and Addie how did they fair - Addie ought to have learned something - Constance pretty clearly did not??

But I was thinking that he might find it in his heart to forgive her. And I guess Marc's marriage counselor wasn't very good. Interesting twist to have the men together again.

Or was it the Fickle Finger Of Fate?

Gets a 5 for originality alone; good way to end it too.

Basically Jason was the son Marc never had. Two men who think alike, work in the same field, live in the same area, are likely to persue the same actions. Even the PI agency being the same agency makes sense.

In addition, one can see how a daughter of a slut would think she could be a slut too without any repercussions.

As for the new loves, obviously these two men shared the same taste in women. Also, there's a whole parallel story line not told that could explain the mother/daughter connection. Would love to read more of this story actually as these guys are quite likable characters.

Very realistic, well illustrated and thought provoking.

You had me worried that he would take her back and while I didn't dislike her, felt sorry for her, he or I would never be able to forget.

Great story, absolute and outstanding ending and again.................Thanks - For A Very Good Read!

Have to admit I was not expecting the ending. Seems the two male characters were meant to be related, one way or the other. Karma maybe?

Good writing, very good indeed.

Nice twist at the end.

... To find out about the after situation with Marc and his family including Addie. Since this is the last story on the list... I'm guessing a sequel is not in the works.

Five stars. Emotionally authentic. Addie's dialogue was superbly written.

Getting to the point was everything this author had in this powerful blockbuster. Amazing double tragedy. Cheaters are not glorified in this account. Great surprise ending. Thank you!

How did I miss this gem? Outstanding tale of consequences here. Great stuff. Only complaint is that nothing happened to Bart the Fart. He knowingly fucked around with an engaged woman, and was KNOWINGLY going to fuck around with her after she was married. The Asshole was in dire need of an ass kicking.

Still 5 Stars.

Well written story with several fascinating twists. Excellent, honorable, male characters in very peculiar circumstances. 5*

Any chance there is or will be Marc and Constance's story. This one was very well written and Marc's story would be a nice addition to making it even better. Well Done, again.

glad to see marc had some backbone too

I missed this one. How? Not sure. It is a damn fine read.

An absolute gem of a story.

Exactly! There is life after a screwed up cheating slut! There are plenty of good people out there. No need to waste your time on the losers! Well written, good story!

What a change to read & enjoy a story with a good plot that is very well written in a straight forward & simple manner. The double cheating by mum & daughter was definitely a different twist, although the ending I thought was unrealistic, let's face it what were the odds, possible, but highly unlikely, hence the lower score. 4 ****

The end was a bit of a surprise.

an enjoyable "NON" wimpy crying in ur beer, excuse for a man wanna stop living tale.

5 stars

Seeing as Jason has gone to such lengths to forget, having his ex-fiance's father walk back into his life could make things interesting, especially at family get togethers. Maybe a Part Two?

You fool me with this story. I thought you were setting it up to take his his ex-fiance back. Was I glad that he did not. What she said after she was caught is your typical cheater responses. What she did and said to her lover were her true feelings. She was very simply a cheater. I was gla that he got away from her without looking back. Thanks for an interesting story with a nice twist.

What Marc's relationship with his daughter is like after she turned out to be just like her mother.

Great story, 5 Stars! Needs a sequel or an epilogue telling what happened to the wife and daughter. I think it would work great from Marc's perspective, starting from when Jason left the house.

Thank you nice to see a tale with feelings and some back bone.

but what are the odds Jason and Marc would wind up with a mother and daughter? From a different part of the country, no less.

at least until the wake-up call. TK U MLJ LV NV

Loved this. Five stars. Good quality writing.