All Comments on 'Unattainable'

Nice pace, kept my interest wondering when and how the two of them would finally hook up. The ending left me yelling SHIT! I can't wait to see what happens when they get together the next day.

I loved the slow build-up and can't wait to read the second chapter

Your pacing was superb. Like Ella, you leave the reader begging for more. But next time, watch out for those mistakes. Ex: you wrote mercy when it appears you meant mercilessly.

The thought process behind the story is a amzing. Not only is the story extremely sexy but it is very well written, and that is more important, to me at least, then how hot the story is. I can not wait until the next part comes out.

I hope this playboy of a big brother gets a taste for his sister no other woman can quench. Would be awesome if they fell in love with each other.

To me , the tryst was too casual and too soon even if it was excellently scripted. Every scene was money and main couple have excellent taboo chemistry but I wanted Ella to be the woman that makes Jack sweat, confounds and astounds him before she gives it up. It would be interesting of Ella's career as journalist gets her sideways with some dubious deal of Jack.

In wrestling parlance Ella is a babyface and Jack is a heel. The heat from antagonism would amp up the suspense . But I'm going a bit too negative . Their edgy conversations have verve which carried over in literally, no holds barred tryst . Excellent first effort from flirtycupcake . I thank the author for sharing.

Full marks. * * * * *

I think you should continue the story as you imagine it. Trying to please other readers will only make your story disconnected.

You are a gifted writer.

Very well written with words that made your story seem to come alive. One change that might have made your story even more entertaining, and added a bit of humor, would have been for Ella to kick Jack in the groin as he was over her. Knock him off his "High Horse" so to speak and allow him time to reappraise his opinion of Ella, and catch his breath. Your story could have proceeded from there in the direction you chose. Just an idea from an old man with a long memory and a sense of humor.

Not normally a fan of incest. But am glad this was the first piece that got me interested. Hope you continue the story.

This sounds like a very intreging story and one I really want to read more. His baby sister is so Hot for her brother and he wants the same thing too it seems. I hope you write the next chapter very soon. Cannot wait to see what they do. Thanks !

I hope you're planning to continue this soon!!!

Love this story! Please tell me part 2 isn't far off, I keep checking hopefully:)

Really hope you continue the story

Make another one soon! I'm loving it. It's sexy, forbidden, and ownership. Please write more

Iove it when naughty is soooo good. Hope there is more soon

This was so good, why did it end so soon?? Please give us more!! I live for the rare stories on this site that are amazing and well written, this is an amazing start and really REALLY hope there is more to come!!!

* 5 stars (nothing less than that)

You cant just leave us hanging like that.

Ever planning on giving us another chapter?

Please give us another chapter for this story

Please add more to this don't leave us hanging

I need moooorrreeee please

Would really really like a second chapter to this installment. Please

Absolutely love your stories. 2 of the very best i`ve ever read. Its a pity we cont have more of this great content available. Please add a few more to your collection !!

Fuck! Where's the rest of it?

I think "leaving them wanting more" is not the worst thing in the world. I was surprised you made the age difference work. The story was believable, which I kind of like.

Really? The brother's a cunt

Just curious cuz it was a great start!

Are you going to add more? Please do ♥️👍🏻

I always wished you would finish this story.

Can't wait for you to write more, such a fantastic story, thank you.

Loved the story, when are you doing the next part???!!!